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A short stroy about what I think would happen if people really did start to transform. At first I wasnt planning on submitting this but my editor said I should so here it is. Be warned, this does not have a happy ending. Please ignore the spelling mistakes.
Category Story / Transformation
Species Raccoon
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 43.2 kB
Oh yeah, here's the feedback I promised. XP
Don't just say fox, bear or cat. Describe them more thoroughly. You may easily imagine those critters, but other readers might not have a wide imagination or have an other sort of image than what you're trying to convey.
But this is a short story, and the characters were kinda expendable, so this is somewhat acceptable.
Oh yeah, besides. The slow tf is perfect, it's far more realistic than the usual 'Stand back! I'm attempting TF! *TF* Success!! I wolf naow!'. XP
Don't just say fox, bear or cat. Describe them more thoroughly. You may easily imagine those critters, but other readers might not have a wide imagination or have an other sort of image than what you're trying to convey.
But this is a short story, and the characters were kinda expendable, so this is somewhat acceptable.
Oh yeah, besides. The slow tf is perfect, it's far more realistic than the usual 'Stand back! I'm attempting TF! *TF* Success!! I wolf naow!'. XP
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