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Continuing the prologue stories, but from a different viewpoint. An information broker recieves a break in a case for a high-profile client, and prepares to personally hunt down the subject.
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This story is set in the Siren Star universe.
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If you decide to indulge me and read, I appreciate a comment with feedback. It helps me improve!
This story is set in the Siren Star universe.
Category Story / All
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Size 120 x 120px
File Size 5.4 kB
hmm... if anything, I think the end gets cut off a little too sudden. Maybe it should've had a line more of explanation of what to come before it was ended.
and...well, sometimes the switching between dialogs and the actions the character does can sometimes be a little confusing. had to read twice sometimes to understand what happened.
but these are really minor things to take notice to. the rest is great!
and...well, sometimes the switching between dialogs and the actions the character does can sometimes be a little confusing. had to read twice sometimes to understand what happened.
but these are really minor things to take notice to. the rest is great!
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