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The conclusion, in which Nick hits a popular club to confront his prey, but finds he may have bitten off more than he can chew.
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If you decide to indulge me and read, I appreciate a comment with feedback. It helps me improve!
This story is set in the Siren Star universe.
<< Previous Part 2
If you decide to indulge me and read, I appreciate a comment with feedback. It helps me improve!
This story is set in the Siren Star universe.
Category Story / All
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 6.5 kB
Loads of sci-fi words but what can one expect?
Regardless the text went more smoothly when being read than the first part, which is good (went down like a smoothie...bad joke, I know)
Some text breaks seem a little unnecessary, for instance: "Without waiting for a response, she turned on her heel and disappeared into the crowd.". probably a case of preference, as this is a gut feeling rather than fact about good writing, but I myself would not have a phrase that little placed all by itself. But then again it might be the same thing the causes the text to be more readable.
Gramma I'm not going to mention as I'm poor at that .
keep up the good work
Regardless the text went more smoothly when being read than the first part, which is good (went down like a smoothie...bad joke, I know)
Some text breaks seem a little unnecessary, for instance: "Without waiting for a response, she turned on her heel and disappeared into the crowd.". probably a case of preference, as this is a gut feeling rather than fact about good writing, but I myself would not have a phrase that little placed all by itself. But then again it might be the same thing the causes the text to be more readable.
Gramma I'm not going to mention as I'm poor at that .
keep up the good work
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