i must say this story was amazing, i was able to picture all the scenes perfectly which is hard for me in a lot of cases, the descriptions were excellent, and the entire story development was great.

Very inspirational, very entertaining, and also very Hot,

Excellent job, and worth the wait.

wonderful, simply wonderful story man!

NICE! i loved reading this story, bravo! long live king pete! :)

Read the whole of it on the blog site, don't really like the format that FA puts writings in lol

Anywho, I thought it was fantastic, but I would've liked to hear about the other potential candidates. The sex scene was hot, which is what I would expect from you :)

I spotted a couple of typos but I wasn't really looking for any so there may be more. Around the beginning you say that Pete is almost 600lbs, then in another spot you say he's almost 700lbs, but when he's on the scale he's 620lbs. The other one I spotted was that you forgot to put in a quotation mark at the beginning of one of Bruno's lines. Nothing major at all from what I saw.

Hey thanks! I'm glad you read it so thoroughly. I kept fluctuating on his weight, so I ctrl+f'd the weight a few times, I knew I was gonna miss one! I fixed those errors, I do appreciate the help. I'm kind of OCD about that sorta thing :<

lol my pleasure. I miss stuff in my work too. Doesn't help my cause any by refusing to read any of it.

These were fun little stories. Thanks for sharing them. :)

u should now make the picture version of this story.

I loved all 8 parts of the story 10/10 ^-^

This is an awesome story