I read it and I thought it was great. I do a bit of writing myself, nothing worthy of submission, (cause I'm a bit sheepish) but I think I know how to read between the lines and look at the author's style.

From what I've seen thus far, this is a very well written piece, you use emotion effectively and the descriptions are good. The best part was "Theo suddenly became fully aware that he was checking the huskie out..." That bit made me laugh the most.

One thing I would improve on is the confusing bit at the beginning where you reference Theo's parents... It says Theo's father had just gotten home from work, then you say Theo didn't want to be around her. Soo... did you mean his Mom got home from work, or did you mean to say he got home from work?

But after I read the next few paragraphs it becomes clearer. Great job, I will now watch you, if you don't mind!

Hehe...that was a typo, sorry. I went back later and fixed it. It was supposed to say "he".

Sorry for confusing you, and thanks for all the compliments!!