This is really fun! The rewinding reality shift gimmick is super neat. And some really good gags in there too!

Thanks! The commissioner was the brain behind that gimmick! Once the commission was pitched I was like "okay I've gotta try this".

Occam is a very clever mouse~

Okay, this is the reason I followed you. I admire the style you go for, reminds me of some of the stuff I go for when I write. It’s very personal, even for being in second person, with all the references to Internet culture and recent events. I think you really did a good job making this perspective seem believable, and this character seem real, even if it is exaggerated somewhat and supposed to be an avatar of the reader to some extent. Kind of odd how the gender of the reader is assumed male, though. I don’t really do that when I write second person. Not that it’s entirely bad (it might have been requested by the commissioner) but it’s something to keep in mind. Also, the reality change idea is interesting! I do like the feel of the character almost being controlled, it kind of inspires me to do something similar in a video game or something. It’s also neat that it kind of turns into a kind of causality loop by the end. Overall, a solid story all around! I hope to see more like this in the future.

Aw thanks! I appreciate it! I try to make the characters and settings feel plausible even if a little silly, so it's good to hear that effort is successful and it's awesome I could contribute to inspiring you. Yeah for this story the commissioner had a specific description in mind for the character. Writing in second person sort of became a weird gimmick I keep doing for some reason and my only theory as to why is because I used to do a lot of TF RPing with people and it just sorta stuck, but despite describing the character as "you" they're really more of characters I'm too lazy to think of a name for =P