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I've been making this for some time though I've not considered putting anything on it here. Its a Mugen character that I did vore edits for. I'm not 100% done with it but if your interested I keep my updates and download info here: http://aryion.com/forum/viewtopic.p.....79&t=24099
(is an animated gif. May have to refresh page to see?) O.=,o?
(is an animated gif. May have to refresh page to see?) O.=,o?
Category Artwork (Digital) / Vore
Species Dragon (Other)
Size 107 x 136px
File Size 95.6 kB
Gonna preface this by saying I like this, it's got nice clean colors and it's a nicely drawn yoshi. The animation's definitely smooth and pleasant.
To start, you would probably do well to have the mouth open at the start. It looks like he's slurping something with his lips closed.
You might want to give the cheeks some more bulge to show the character in his mouth. As it looks now, the swelling in his gut far exceeds the swelling of his cheeks. Exaggerate dem cheeks! Also, with the swelling of his throat, it looks more like a fluid flowing in. I'd have the neck swell under the chin right where it meets head to make it look like he's swallowing something big and solid.
Alternatively for a fast gulp, I would have the maw wide open and the head tilted back with him leaned forwards. Just give them a straight shot, lips to throat to stomach, bam bam bam.
The jiggle is a nice touch, but it sorta goes all over. First it bounces, then is jostles back and forth. I think one or the other would probably be best, not both. If the mass landed in his gut and he was leaned back so it bounced up and down as it settled, I think that'd look good. If it sloshed back and fourth between his legs as it settled, that'd look good. I think them combined makes it seem jerky and erratic when it really needs to be nice 'n' smooth.
With the things I think you can improve on out of the way, I want to again say how nice that swallow looks. You manage to capture a lot of movement in very few frames which is a very good skill. Looking forwards to seeing further iterations of this and more!
To start, you would probably do well to have the mouth open at the start. It looks like he's slurping something with his lips closed.
You might want to give the cheeks some more bulge to show the character in his mouth. As it looks now, the swelling in his gut far exceeds the swelling of his cheeks. Exaggerate dem cheeks! Also, with the swelling of his throat, it looks more like a fluid flowing in. I'd have the neck swell under the chin right where it meets head to make it look like he's swallowing something big and solid.
Alternatively for a fast gulp, I would have the maw wide open and the head tilted back with him leaned forwards. Just give them a straight shot, lips to throat to stomach, bam bam bam.
The jiggle is a nice touch, but it sorta goes all over. First it bounces, then is jostles back and forth. I think one or the other would probably be best, not both. If the mass landed in his gut and he was leaned back so it bounced up and down as it settled, I think that'd look good. If it sloshed back and fourth between his legs as it settled, that'd look good. I think them combined makes it seem jerky and erratic when it really needs to be nice 'n' smooth.
With the things I think you can improve on out of the way, I want to again say how nice that swallow looks. You manage to capture a lot of movement in very few frames which is a very good skill. Looking forwards to seeing further iterations of this and more!
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