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well this is my first story I've written that i have posted on the internet...I'm not expecting great reviews because to be honest I'm not that great of a writer...so if you wanna look into the story of how my Blaziken came to be...here you go.
Proofread by:
Pokemon © Nintendo
Conatus, Celia, Ryker, Kacey © Me
Proofread by:
Pokemon © Nintendo
Conatus, Celia, Ryker, Kacey © Me
Category Story / Pokemon
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 115px
File Size 49 kB
Very interestng start. Good plot so far, accurate, believeable and realistic characters, and a cute way to start it (which is kinda disappointing in a way cuz you said it would turn out as a tragedy). I saw a few areas in your style that could be touched on (all writers have them =p), and I'd be happy to help ya with them if you want =3
well thanks Luke =3 that's very helpful and positive...this is the first story i ever posted so yay for unintentional professional writing =3 or beginners luck. also the reason i didnt ask u to proof read before was cuz u are usually busy and it would have been selfish to ask that of you...but if u wanna do it...then id be happy if u would ^w^ again thanks for the get review!
well, one of the errors i saw was a repetitive punctuation thingy (i havent come across anyone who doesnt have some sort of punctuation problems XP) and the other one was a part of your style you might wanna alter a bit. but, for your first story this was pretty good. and for next time, i'm sure i'll have 20-30 mins to spare to proofread for ya =p
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