Kunai,

Well, needs a good edit. Tenses are very mesy, past tense is the one you want for this story.
Missing a majority of your periods.
dialogue tags need a comma. Ex: “Asmond, you seem particularly well spirited today,” I said nonchalantly getting out of my messy covers and stretch my wings, “I assume you barged in here with a reason.”

The story though is a good start with youthful energy, interesting world details, and good relationship work tied to character.

For continuing that is up to you.That is the nature of stories. They only happen when they are written. Audience finds itself.