Yes indeed.

This is REALLY GOOD.

Thanks, Train. That's encouraging to hear ^_^ Part 2 is typed up and almost ready; I'll post it once I'm far enough into part 3, which shouldn't be too long from now.

Oh good. I really want to see how she looks.

Aelius, I've got a few suggestions (but ones you don't need to follow) to boost the depth to this story:

1. Make the actions of the corporation against the characters include financial and legal routes for a more subtle and insidious form of attack. It's much easier to rob someone's voice when they have nothing to support themselves with, and commoners are much weaker when they are caught in bureaucracy's web of red tape. A corporation like this would also keep some "shell divisions," essentially glorified mail boxes in other countries with looser laws; money routed through several "shells" could confuse anybody hunting for the truth.

2. Maybe give them stock in a media division. It might not be the dominating voice on television, radio, or print news, but it can sway millions if done correctly. A few planted editorials demeaning a crusade against Makanashi Corporation could be the catalyst for more citizens to fall in line with that position.

I realize that I'm starting to sound like a Marxist or an anarchist exhorting you to produce an anti-corporate screed so the masses may wake up, and I'm sheepishly admitting that I have those opinions in me. I'm also not the one who's doing the writing, so I won't bother you any more about this. You do NOT have to rewrite what you've done if you feel satisfied or if you want to honor my suggestions.

Those are some really good ideas! I might be able to integrate some of those suggestions in a future tale; while it's a tad late to use them in the current story, the forces at play kinda negate their effectiveness (that'll be explained in the next installment :p ). Thanks for the tips!