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“In ancient times, the humans lived among other anthromorphic creatures, or an animal with human qualities. They lived among each other with little issues. The humans where the most dominate in terms of numbers. They grew tired of being associated with there cousins, the apes, chimps, and the others. They soon gathered there armies of the best knights, and most fearsome archers, and attacked there less civilized cousins. The other groups watched as this happened, they considered it fighting within the family. As the human armies swept across the villages, they began to notice something, there cousins where losing there anthromorphic features, a process that was called fearization. They soon pulled back, and started to slowly isolate there cities from the other groups. There was one city, in present day Moscow, where every group lived. At the time this was the head of the world, anything diplomatic, finical, or anything else that may have been of importance, was held there. This city was called, “Blood Red”, was controlled by an ancient group. They where very few in numbers, and only resided at there city. They where know as the Chiroptera, or nicknamed vampire bats. They had gray fur, about as tall as a large man, and had a wing span of about six feet. They where the thing of legends and horror stories, they feed on other creatures blood, and where said to poses super natural powers. The humans feared this small group, they had advance technology, political power every where, and could easily crush any group that where to stand against them. The humans knew this, but they knew that they where not the only group that feared them, or wanted to end them. One of the few groups that was actually considered an allie by the humans , the Canis Lupus where easily convinced to aid in the fight against Chiroptera. Another group, not an allie, nor an enemy, had spies every where. One of there diplomatics came to the human official, and the offered to aid the humans in the upcoming battle. The humans knew they where being used, but the Felis Catus knew that even with the two largest groups, they stood no chance against the raw might of the Chiroptera empire. They aggred and they soon gatherd there respected armies, and surrounded “Blood Red”. The Chiroptera shaman sinced the upcoming battle, so they struck forst, attacking the Felis Catus, taking out a large portion of there main army. The Felis Catus genral recoverd the loss quite quickly and earned the group the nick name of “nine lives”. The Chiroptera fought hard, but where massively out numbered, they where driven from there only home, and the humans took control of the city. The human government offered a high paying reward for any Chiroptera caught and killed, driving them into extinction, leaving the humans at the top of the world unchallenged. The human officials knew the only way for them to guarantee that they would hold there throne, was to eliminate all other groups. They took out ach group one by one, cleaning them from the essence of history. The Felis Catus and Canis Lupus where always mortal enemies, and soon after the onslaught of the human armies, they feralized one and other. The humans now stood unchallenged, and with no need for any one to need to know of this great blood shed, the story of the great anthromorphic creatures faded from history.” A pale man in a business suite said to a group of children, he looked at his watch, and the gazed at the group of children.
“So, Mr. Is that why cats and dogs don’t like each other?”, the man laughed in a playful manner at the child’s question. “Well, I guess so”, “Mr. Why haven’t I ever heard this story before?”, “Because it never happened” the man said as he stood up and patted the child on the head. He out his top hat on, and walked away, blending with the large group of New Yorkers strolling by.
This is the begging of a story, I'll post more If people want, but will see where this leads.
I've been writing a lot, wanting to get my skills up for any creative writing scholarships, if you know of any just pint this lil o furry the right way please.
Comment and advice please
And P.S- This is not just another, human vs. furry story, this has a lot more then just evil humans and poor furrys.
“In ancient times, the humans lived among other anthromorphic creatures, or an animal with human qualities. They lived among each other with little issues. The humans where the most dominate in terms of numbers. They grew tired of being associated with there cousins, the apes, chimps, and the others. They soon gathered there armies of the best knights, and most fearsome archers, and attacked there less civilized cousins. The other groups watched as this happened, they considered it fighting within the family. As the human armies swept across the villages, they began to notice something, there cousins where losing there anthromorphic features, a process that was called fearization. They soon pulled back, and started to slowly isolate there cities from the other groups. There was one city, in present day Moscow, where every group lived. At the time this was the head of the world, anything diplomatic, finical, or anything else that may have been of importance, was held there. This city was called, “Blood Red”, was controlled by an ancient group. They where very few in numbers, and only resided at there city. They where know as the Chiroptera, or nicknamed vampire bats. They had gray fur, about as tall as a large man, and had a wing span of about six feet. They where the thing of legends and horror stories, they feed on other creatures blood, and where said to poses super natural powers. The humans feared this small group, they had advance technology, political power every where, and could easily crush any group that where to stand against them. The humans knew this, but they knew that they where not the only group that feared them, or wanted to end them. One of the few groups that was actually considered an allie by the humans , the Canis Lupus where easily convinced to aid in the fight against Chiroptera. Another group, not an allie, nor an enemy, had spies every where. One of there diplomatics came to the human official, and the offered to aid the humans in the upcoming battle. The humans knew they where being used, but the Felis Catus knew that even with the two largest groups, they stood no chance against the raw might of the Chiroptera empire. They aggred and they soon gatherd there respected armies, and surrounded “Blood Red”. The Chiroptera shaman sinced the upcoming battle, so they struck forst, attacking the Felis Catus, taking out a large portion of there main army. The Felis Catus genral recoverd the loss quite quickly and earned the group the nick name of “nine lives”. The Chiroptera fought hard, but where massively out numbered, they where driven from there only home, and the humans took control of the city. The human government offered a high paying reward for any Chiroptera caught and killed, driving them into extinction, leaving the humans at the top of the world unchallenged. The human officials knew the only way for them to guarantee that they would hold there throne, was to eliminate all other groups. They took out ach group one by one, cleaning them from the essence of history. The Felis Catus and Canis Lupus where always mortal enemies, and soon after the onslaught of the human armies, they feralized one and other. The humans now stood unchallenged, and with no need for any one to need to know of this great blood shed, the story of the great anthromorphic creatures faded from history.” A pale man in a business suite said to a group of children, he looked at his watch, and the gazed at the group of children.
“So, Mr. Is that why cats and dogs don’t like each other?”, the man laughed in a playful manner at the child’s question. “Well, I guess so”, “Mr. Why haven’t I ever heard this story before?”, “Because it never happened” the man said as he stood up and patted the child on the head. He out his top hat on, and walked away, blending with the large group of New Yorkers strolling by.
This is the begging of a story, I'll post more If people want, but will see where this leads.
I've been writing a lot, wanting to get my skills up for any creative writing scholarships, if you know of any just pint this lil o furry the right way please.
Comment and advice please
And P.S- This is not just another, human vs. furry story, this has a lot more then just evil humans and poor furrys.
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Well the end transition and consummation of this part was done well, and is very good. Now, a beginning is an important thing as it drags the audience into the work. The prologuish narrative despite told be a narrator is questionable do to telling instead of showing. Now, of course this depends on your dissuasions with your own rhetoric presentation. Despite fiction is fiction the rhetoric is questioned to state of development. You have a lot of ideas that seem good but either promise success if handled correctly or fallacy for the work. As soon as we leave the narrative of the top hated man the work holds the key to authors promise. The archetypes also debated in forms of common archetypes, which as of now you are still good in treading the water. Basically as a story it is not bad, but in breaking down the building material it is not titanium. However, most read a work for reading a work and enjoy the story. Good luck with the rest.
Wow that was quite in-depth, I had to have my ap English teacher to translate, I don't follow black of that XD.
Humm lets see, the reasons it lacks imagery is because its being told like a story from a history book, more fact related then images, to a group of children. The reason it has the common characters is because its just a vague story told just to get a basic idea. That's all I can thunk of to answer, but I was a little confused by some of the things you siad like "despite fiction is fiction" I didn't follow your angle on this.
Humm lets see, the reasons it lacks imagery is because its being told like a story from a history book, more fact related then images, to a group of children. The reason it has the common characters is because its just a vague story told just to get a basic idea. That's all I can thunk of to answer, but I was a little confused by some of the things you siad like "despite fiction is fiction" I didn't follow your angle on this.
To simplify. It depends on the bar your setting for yourself. I understand the rhetoric of the piece. The choices you made in writing it basically creates holes that create problems from the work. A catch-22 (one thing for another). It can be very cool or very stupid. Despite fiction is fiction is a catch fall against a fallacy. It means very little, basically a cover up excuse to my statement. The elements of the world you are building despite that it is fiction is crap on the scale of realism vs. naturism vs. romanticism. Common archetypes are basically elements of the work that are used everywhere, and thus are pretty damn close to being cliché. If these archetypes are not supported, than they will become cliché. The tophat man is the savior of this piece’s problems. The big question about your presentation and rhetorical triangle is why the fuck waste our time in an introductory story told from him to children. It makes sense to the main point of what your doing, but beyond the you and the text the audience is cast out. It is only a beginning, and it is understandable. Basically all of this is a are you sure, because you as the writer needs to reinforce this greatly throughout the rest of the text for this beginning to work. It’s basically making a sandwich with holed bread. Still works, but messy. No offence is meant by my observation formed by my opinion and frame of refrence alone. You as the author can only call the shots.
This always goes to my writing style, I don't know why but I always give some kind of useless information (in the begging it is at least), but the information always it used in the long run, I can see how you see the top hated man as a "savior", but its just the main character, telling children the stroy gives basic out line to the audience, at the sane time adds to the story.
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