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Next chapter, this was a chapter that I wrote two years ago, just modified a little bit.
Category Story / Miscellaneous
Species Raccoon
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 25.2 kB
Ow...my brain...I'm gonna admit, I read about halfway down and then I was just having too much trouble following it. The lack of saying who is talking, and the back and forth conversation that goes on so long honestly confuses me. Interesting story, just not an easy read....especially online, my eyes are on fire
that's my constructive criticism, sorry.
that's my constructive criticism, sorry.
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