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The completed prequel of The Fox aside from maybe a bit of touching up. Namedly spelling. Hence-forth it will be [A Fox, A Lock, and an Ivory Box] Once I finish the prequel for [The Lock] and [The Ivory Box] that is.
It is difficult to explain this story so please bear with me on this...
Charles in a intern at a game and graphics design company but as he strides home something happens to him. Disregarding it Charles falls asleep only to wake up days later to find he is now covered in fur, his nails are now claws, and he has fox ears. Charles and his friend Wreqil devise a plan so Charles may try to continue life until his 'transformation' runs it's course. So with a hat to cover his ears and the excuse of Lycathropes disease he sets out for work. After work Charles and Wreqil stumble upon a woman being harassed by four men in an alley. With his mind already on edge from his terrible removal from humanity Charles is sent into a violent rage and attacks the men, killing them in terribly bloody ways. Seeing what he had done triggers the power within him to overload and he is transported to a different dimension. A place he remembers from his dreams. There waits a man with knowledge he shouldn't have. The man calls him The Fox and insists they are waiting for The Lock and The Ivory Box. Having no other options Charles hunkers down to wait with the mysterious man.
Thats the best I can sum it up, my apologies.
(M) Wreqil >pronounced> Reh-quill
(M) Charles
(F) Lucy >pronounced> Lucy
FEEDBACK IS APPRECIATED.
And no, I couldn't think of any better way to insinuate a heartbeat
It is difficult to explain this story so please bear with me on this...
Charles in a intern at a game and graphics design company but as he strides home something happens to him. Disregarding it Charles falls asleep only to wake up days later to find he is now covered in fur, his nails are now claws, and he has fox ears. Charles and his friend Wreqil devise a plan so Charles may try to continue life until his 'transformation' runs it's course. So with a hat to cover his ears and the excuse of Lycathropes disease he sets out for work. After work Charles and Wreqil stumble upon a woman being harassed by four men in an alley. With his mind already on edge from his terrible removal from humanity Charles is sent into a violent rage and attacks the men, killing them in terribly bloody ways. Seeing what he had done triggers the power within him to overload and he is transported to a different dimension. A place he remembers from his dreams. There waits a man with knowledge he shouldn't have. The man calls him The Fox and insists they are waiting for The Lock and The Ivory Box. Having no other options Charles hunkers down to wait with the mysterious man.
Thats the best I can sum it up, my apologies.
(M) Wreqil >pronounced> Reh-quill
(M) Charles
(F) Lucy >pronounced> Lucy
FEEDBACK IS APPRECIATED.
And no, I couldn't think of any better way to insinuate a heartbeat
Category Story / All
Species Vulpine (Other)
Size 90 x 120px
File Size 46.1 kB
hehe the heart beat is fine ^^ and I don't think I have anything bad to point out. It's to me more like your way of telling a story and I am fine with it. But maybe you can substitute some words with the one with bit more feels. Like words that gives off the moods when read. I know it's ambiguous but I can't explain it that well. Sorry.
Actually I know exactly what you mean, most of the time whilst writing this I had an online dictionary on-hand but other times not so much. I usually try to shoot for finding the words that really put the feeling into a story, that give it weight and emotion, words that bring the story alive inside the mind of the reader.
And thank you, I still have some spell checking to do though, and a few touches of revision~
And thank you, I still have some spell checking to do though, and a few touches of revision~
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