Finally got back to reading on this and finished the second two chapters. I spotted like... two spelling mistakes in chapter three. And in chapter two, Alex responds to every "really bad thing" that happens during the duel by saying "Oh no" each time(he says it at least once at the beginning of chapter 3 too); that felt repeatative/overused.

And I dunno if I mentioned it before, but I thought it odd how you used (brackets) for thoughts. I'd normally have looked for 'these' and/or italics. It still works though, so no real fault in that.

Aaaaand overall, a pretty good story, which I'd say accomplished pretty much exactly what you set out to do with it: emulate the drama/action of the yugioh series. Might have felt a little cheesy at times, BUT yugioh itself often felt cheesy at times, so I'd say that makes it even more perfect. XD Nice job.

The overuse of the phrase "Oh no" was intentional, as was "You fool" and "You're finished" and etc. due to seeing a video littlekuriboh made that showed exactly how much the anime overused those phrases.

Anyways, thanks for taking the time to read this thing, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.