I was hoping you would submit this instead of as a journal, I wanted to favorite it. : }

I think a lot of people do.

Do you have any feedback?

I really like it so far, like I said before. I am a big fan of people putting in all the little details in stories, long or short so when you described the different details of, say the skeletons, or the different rooms it brings me into the story more. And I enjoy how you are telling the story from the perspective of the person who is being told the story, rather than a passive observer or the main character himself. Its sort of an interesting twist for me, especially when he inserts his own opinions into the text, or got a little sidetracked, like at the beginning. I can imagine this took quite a bit of work and I am looking forward to the next chapters.
The only things wrong I could see, would be lacking detail in other areas, like the goblins and kobolds, who were little more than just species names, aside from the one who had decided to wear the dwarves armor. But thats not to important really. : }

The amount of development you put into the main character and his world itself is quite amazing for such a short fic. Personally the only difficulty I found, being one who mainly just reads fantasy and has never touched any of the big title rp games, was trying to differentiate between the species (specifically how do goblins differ from kobolds) and trying to get much of a feel for the other cast members who seemed to serve little more purpose than tragic cannon fodder.

Nevertheless, if there will be more then this is a solid start.

I really enjoyed it, despite "letter stories" usually boring me to death. It's a great start! Reminds me of a D&D/Forgotten Realms story, which may be why I wasn't overly confused about the difference between a goblin and a kobold. Hoping to see a little more character development in the next one!

~GR

Cool story, reminds me of NeverWinterKnights and all the other Dand D stuff . I give it two thumbsup.

It was good.

As I said in the journal, I love the detail and the amount of work you've obviously put into this story. This is a great story for someone who's into fantasy (which happens to be me, for one :D )

As i said in your Journal, Exellent story. I wish i could give you some more constructive feedback than that, but I'm not much of a writer.