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Been meaning to write this poem for a while, and since I presently can't sing (sinus congestion) it seems a good time.
Category Poetry / Miscellaneous
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Goodness, such powerful brevity!--and the subject matter. (o.o)
It feels as if the message is general enough to be widely applied--no doubt its simplicity contributes to that--however, the consistent 4th line, "I will not let the Devil win," gives the poem a pervasive religious depth. =D
I'm very fond of the (confess/acquiesce) rhyme; I admittedly had to look up the latter word, but, rest assured, it's now apart of my ever expanding vocab. Now, in regards to that particular word, I believe it compliments the content and contributes to the overall air of the poem; "acquiesce" definitely has an angelic feel to it, and offers a lovely ethereal color to the piece. ^^
Actually, I find the middle (3rd) quatrain to be the checkpoint of the poem, in that it seems to be the lightest and most beautiful (again, referring back to "acquiesce"), despite the poem being primarily abstract. =3
And, of course, your metrics (iambic tetrameter) are spot on; I would expect nothing less from the person who taught me to listen for them. A lovely composition, Max!
It feels as if the message is general enough to be widely applied--no doubt its simplicity contributes to that--however, the consistent 4th line, "I will not let the Devil win," gives the poem a pervasive religious depth. =D
I'm very fond of the (confess/acquiesce) rhyme; I admittedly had to look up the latter word, but, rest assured, it's now apart of my ever expanding vocab. Now, in regards to that particular word, I believe it compliments the content and contributes to the overall air of the poem; "acquiesce" definitely has an angelic feel to it, and offers a lovely ethereal color to the piece. ^^
Actually, I find the middle (3rd) quatrain to be the checkpoint of the poem, in that it seems to be the lightest and most beautiful (again, referring back to "acquiesce"), despite the poem being primarily abstract. =3
And, of course, your metrics (iambic tetrameter) are spot on; I would expect nothing less from the person who taught me to listen for them. A lovely composition, Max!
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