Biggest issue is transitions since the narrative is shifting from one point of view to another, there needs to be something or wording to mark it as shifted. I.E. Meanwhile / Over Here / In the (place), (character) is doing (action/verb). Generally something to mark the jump in location or time. There is nothing really wrong with it, but it does feel like there are a bunch of random references, but its perhaps a matter of personal taste, so I cannot properly judge their use.

The transition were a problem because that's something I typically do later and while I was writing this I was rushing to get stories out. And yeah this was full of random references to every Christmas movie I have ever watched

Feel free to edit/add on to it then at your leisure! :3