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Jim makes his plans to reveal dragons to the world--while making a nice profit from it--while the dragons prepare to get the hell out of Dodge before anything worse can happen.
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Hey look! Maybe now this story has settled on a possible antagonist. Y'know, if you don't find Jim's greediness and desire of higher social standing to be a proper man's motivation, and if you can't excuse a lack of knowledge on his part. I do feel rather satisfied with this chapter, though, even if the whole thing is just 'check out Jim's thought process!'
Comments and critique greatly appreciated.
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Hey look! Maybe now this story has settled on a possible antagonist. Y'know, if you don't find Jim's greediness and desire of higher social standing to be a proper man's motivation, and if you can't excuse a lack of knowledge on his part. I do feel rather satisfied with this chapter, though, even if the whole thing is just 'check out Jim's thought process!'
Comments and critique greatly appreciated.
Category Story / All
Species Western Dragon
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 31.3 kB
Listed in Folders
This made me quite nervous to read. A scientist (not a deranged or foul in the head but sane and very desperate) is the most traumatic antagonist that a story can have in my experience. (Example: Michael Crichton's "Sphere"- He also wrote the book "Jurassic Park")
Great job with the story and don't worry if it's a slow chapter; low-key chapters increase the suspense and make the rest of the story that much more exciting! Character background and looks into how their brain functions are also Key to making a dramatic third-person POV Story
Great job with the story and don't worry if it's a slow chapter; low-key chapters increase the suspense and make the rest of the story that much more exciting! Character background and looks into how their brain functions are also Key to making a dramatic third-person POV Story
True, and he is doing what any seller of a rare breed should do; sell it only to Zoos. The part that he is failing to consider is the fact that Dragons are sentient beings; this is what could get him in trouble, killed or worse, in the end. (sorry if I'm being a plot spoiler to anyone ^^;
Jim's not totally a bad person, just... misinformed, greedy, unwilling to let go of what he's trying to get, etc.
A massive UN state isn't all it's cracked up to be! Being so big makes it bloated, corrupt, slow and resistant to change... Plus loss of national pride and identity.
A massive UN state isn't all it's cracked up to be! Being so big makes it bloated, corrupt, slow and resistant to change... Plus loss of national pride and identity.
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