It’s very much WIP with not a lot going on. Ferret gets up and eats Coco Pops. People need something, we need a story, something happening to engage with.

Your excited to share, but yeah there is time to share and explore that. So, take your time and keep working on it.

There is also just an edge here between comedy versus serious story.
So, what I mean by that. Your first paragraph would be the type of thing to not do in serious writing. Its both telling which we should not do as writers, our goal to always show and it involves the wrong tense. A beginning serves to get the audiences attention. A normal another day in a little town, waking up, and eating coco pops. That does not = captivating.

If its comedy though, with super tongue and cheek, then that criticism does not stand. I admit, I started laughing because say out loud Ferret woke up another day in Fursdom eating Coco pops. This is not me making fun of your writing, this is literally funny in its tone and genre. A mudnaess of the absurd which is a great form of comedy. For a comedy opening that way, its gold.

So, like I said we don’t have much. That’s the cross road of what you wanted this to be. Serious or comedy. Comedy lets you break rules and people like comedy, gives you a lot more room. I’m not sure how serious you wanted this to be versus a chaotic road map.

Keep a writing.

Well yeah like I said it was a 1st page, there is going to be a lot more :3

Also yeah this is more of a comedy life kinda thing rather than something serious. I am a rather non serious person as you can tell from ma writing and my name x3

I appreciate the comment and I hope you stick around to enjoy the story <3