Interesting!

There is a tiny little problem where Victor refers to both his habitat's as well as other ship's command as "my government". Personally I would avoid that, if only to make sure that people he interacts with would treat him as one of the "good guys".

Do you mean when Victor says in the police station, "My government has determined that they are about to be punished for this crime.”?

That too. I think that the point that jumped at me was even earlier, in the car, but I'll have to look it up.

What you say is true, but they can give away a cure for cancer if they want to be seen as nice. Kigali was a display of raw military power and political will. Sadly both are needed to be taken seriously, and Victor et all lack the time to do it subtly.

Yes, but... The whole beginning seems to have the "rushing to save the world" feeling, along with Hugo leaving an impression that the whole bombing could have been avoided if people cooperated with them just a little bit more. Add to that the fact you are heavily implying that the party responsible for the attack holds our heroes in contempt (and very clearly took the power into their own hands) and, in my humble opinion, a little bit of Us vs. Them mentality should have kicked in in Hugo.

Ah, no. Well... Hmm. I hadn't considdered that particular view of events. I'll have to engage in some damage control.

On the Us vs Them thing... Winston Churchill was a great man who led my nation through a dark and terrible time, and arguably more than any other person sowed the seeds of Nazi Germay's ultimate defeat. He was also a bigoted racist, and sexist, and a drunkard, and while he respected the working class he had no desire to see them elevated for their hard work.

It wasn't that he was a bad man, he just didn't know any better. This is pretty much Victor's attitude; that the problem is a simple lack of education, and that everyone will come around once the facts are presented. He's wrong of course, and this is where character development kicks in...