Awwww, that was a very cute and descriptive story! I wouldn't mind maybe doin a collaborative story with ya sometime. ^^

I feel I have to say this. Although the little kid is kind of realistic, he is, without a doubt, not trying to offend anyone, the GAYEST kid ever. Yeah, bathroom humor is popular with younger kids, but the whole "wants to help mommy" thing, is really, really weird. Also, the part where he accepts it feels really rushed.

hehe, nice story; great work ^^

First of all, having someone regress and end up in less-than satisfactory circumstances is one thing, but did you have to make Jay absolutely miserable with every single thing that happened to him?
I wanted to shoot myself from depression.
And if I was in his situation, I would tell Matt to shut the hell up about the trainer signs and continue to curse in his face just to spite them.
No one deserves to go through all that crap if they don't want it to happen.

And secondly, this story is way too long :/

... Its hard to tell trough text, are you taking the piss?

To be honest the story is pretty dam well written and not all of them need to be lovey dovey with happy endings or circumstances that everyone loves. Its a nice twist to regression, where 90% of art/stories have it as "woo! young again!"

Plus your "critique" ... besides the fact of not really being constructive at all is pretty poor. A story being too long? Now if it was complete dribble and unchanging or way over descriptive then yes, i would agree that it would be too long. Seeing as it is niether i would still say was a pleasant read. Personally hoping the entire comment IS sarcasm, if not, feel free to go through with the shooting thy self

In a way it is unchanging.
More than half of the story is situations where Jay says he doesn't want to do this or wear that, but his sister says something and he usually answers with the words "Fine I guess".
Then the whole damn thing is Jay getting embarassed and degraded on an unimaginable scale.

Aye, but the situations do change and as someone who is pissed off with a situation, would tend to say "fine whatever". It does show the fact that the character is impatient and unhappy and just wants the situation over with.

You do know your bieng a slight hypocrite right? "Whole damn thing is jay getting embarassed and degraded on an unimaginable scale", Comparing this to some of your work "Trace's Turn" it is very mild. As stated not every story has to be all up beat, with everyone singing songs and with a derp faced smiley sun in the sky. Personally I do enjoy your writing aswell as lig's but the comment you've left is a bit uncalled for. As another story writer you could have probably given quite a good critique on it, but somehow "I wanted to shoot myself from depression" doesnt really help writers at all.

I don't write stuff like Trace's Turn anymore, if you looked at anything in my gallery that's less than a year old :/

Missed the point, and yes have looked at your gallery and have read recent stories. It would atleast be better to have a think about what your going to leave the artist as a comment to their submission rarther than, "OMFG THIS IS DIFFERENT FROM NORMAL STORIES LIG HAS DONE. DONT LIKE. MUST COMPLAIN." I honest to God thought you were trolling when i read the first comment, then reading your FA page.. just leaves me puzzled. I'm sure i've seen worse and pathetic stuff on FA than this, yet you chose a decent story to bash?

What if someone had left a comment like yours on an art piece you had spent a few hours or days working on? Its not a nice feeling for the person at all, and really Negative critique would have been better since Lig could have actually got something out of it, for instance MegaMatt's comment is one Lig can work from. Saddly cant be please everyone.

This is the only full-length story I've read from Lig, because for some reason he doesn't submit them on dA where I found him first.
And believe me, I bash worse things than this too. Of course it's usually on porn stuff, and every single person here is fucking disgusting so they just give the same reaction as you have.
And it seems MegaMatt is just saying that one character is really stupid, meaning he's bashing the story just like I'm apparently doing.

Actually, MegaMatt's comment IS something that can be used as a positive for Lig, as it is actually a polite negative feedback, yours however is something would expect from one of the close minded members of the fandom let alone another babyfur, and i dont suppose your having a bad day? gritty vagina? The reaction you took to the other cub pointing out the accidents is over the top, and entire comment just isnt helpfull, to save repeating myself, have made my point.

"every single person here is fucking disgusting so they just give the same reaction as you have." Right. Thats some awesome maturity you have going right there, besides the fact painting everyone with the same brush, and assuming I'm trying to "troll/have a go at you". Would like to point out the reaction im giving is a way to make your comment aid the artist instead of merely putting them down. Which by the way is alot better than some of the less tolerant people on this site would do, some fo the "FanGaurds" would completely and utterly flame and troll the shit out of someone if they left a comment like yours on their favourite artists submissions.

And you know what, it actually doesn't seem to me that the described excited feeling about being young again is all over the place in stories.
I actually see more embarassment stuff like this.
Then there's the porn...

I would probably say, dont go to ARarchive for stories, if this was too depressing for you, the ones there would probably cause you to take a leap of faith off a cliff and the AR based stories i've read throughout FA are pretty much- Moody start, Regression, Joy, Happy ending. Theres always porn, just by hovering the mouse over FA you are greeted by a sea of horny furry porn of so many kinds that anyones brain would never be the same again.

The only ones of that kind I've really seen here are mine and someone else's stories, and that's about it.

And actually there's quite a few errors in this story.
Apparently I'm the only person that goes back through things they write before submitting.

Why are you still here?

Just because the story wasn't written to your exact tastes doesn't make it bad. Go troll somewhere else.

I happen to like how it's not your EVERY OTHER FUCKING AR STORY type of story. It's different, it's refreshing. So many retarded writers on this god damned site think just because THEY would love to be pissing themselves all over gain, that every character should as well. No one has any fucking depth, and you sir are no exception it would seem. I suppose that Deeker's gone, this is where you've got left?

I came back here after my original post to commend him on a few things I had thought about after the story. How I thought he did a fine job of making me really understand Jay's thinking through all this. Sure, he was independent and very much enjoying his adulthood. It was hard for him to consider giving it all up, and you can tell by the writing that he felt that his ailment was going to be a temporary setback in all that. The entire story is him learning to cope with the fact that this is his new status. All he could see was what he had lost, and not anything he had gained.

You, sir, need to get a life.

Awesome story, Lig. ^W^

I'd have to say, great story! It's almost making me want to keep working on a few of the ideas I have laid out... curse this procrastination!

I think it's rather well done I do however feel bad for Jay seeing as he really never asked for this. Still good job. ^ _ ^

Awsomw story lig...a little on the dark side but all in all reminds me of those that have lost there dignity in life and chouse to accept it and even embrace it.

I don't usually take the time to read stories, but I did yours - and I'm glad I did. Good job on this one. I saw a few spelling mistakes, but a quick re-read would reveal them to you. They didn't take away from the readability though, which is awesome. I often skip stories because I find them unreadable. I have a very vivid and active imagination, to the point where the story becomes more of a mental movie. I lose myself in it... and that's what I enjoy. Reading some lesser quality stories often leaves me flailing about.

I do hope you plan on a sequel perhaps? You hinted to so much in the last portion of the story, almost as if there could be an entire series from this. How about a potential for a web comic? "Adventures of Jay" anyone? :P

The only cringe factor is the word "pawpers" - but that's from some age-old SecondLife drama that was utterly retarded. It's nothing to do with you. :)

Wow, that's one hell of a story! Brilliant work!!

D'awwww!

Cool story Lig! I feel a bit bad about it but I knida wonder about the darker side of ARV though. Specifically the end. Does ARV extend your lifespan or would one live as long as one normally would? Or does it hit a sort of reset button and you age from the point you stop at despite not growing any older?

Another question, is that picture in your gallery somewhere? I can't read the talk bubbles on the thumbnail up there.

Yes the thumnail full pic is in my gallery. Here's the pic.

http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2939021/

As for the other questions. Well I'm honestly not sure. My thinking is that the ARV is linked to FOY water in some way so would have similiar effects. But I'm still uncertain and decided to reflect that. As at this point in the story's universe nobody knows the long term effects either.

Heheh, what's funny is I thought of that when I went to bed. Sounds like it hasn't been around much yet so no way of knowing right?

Right. So far only a few years if that. Not long enough to get any good data on the long term effects of it.

Nice! i liked this story! ^^

Great story, Lig! Always good to see your writings, you do it so well! ^.^

I felt it was without a doubt the best story you have written so far.
As always it is a pleasure to view your work.
And please make another (art or comic or story or anything) with Jay.

Very good one. There are some parts that seem rushed, and I can't help but notice how the long paragraphs of descriptions mixed with the dialogue make the text look odd at times. But really, I would love to write this well.

wowwwwwww, this is amazing!!!!!

This is nicer then most stories with diapers...they noramly have alot use-ige of them,its a nice change for once

cool story, I liked it :)

^^ fun to read, good jyob! <3

Would love to see a sequel story

I feel bad that my phone made me lose my place but I'll fav it, it seemed great.

The story so long.
I can't read them all.

Does this story still continue?

Wait for next story😥