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Another short one. I plan on making the next story at least three pages long. Please comment.
Another short one. I plan on making the next story at least three pages long. Please comment.
Category Story / Vore
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 2.4 kB
I'm gonna be honest, I was 50/50 thinking of even reading a story on the front page, and i clicked this one just because you said "Please comment." *goes to read*
Quite a cute little story. I noticed a few grammatical mistakes, and to be honest the back-and-forth in quotes like this "blah blah blah" needs to be organized different, it's hard to follow, but I also noticed a good level of vocabulary and thought flow. Not to treat it too much like an english assignment, haha =^.^= I liked it.
Quite a cute little story. I noticed a few grammatical mistakes, and to be honest the back-and-forth in quotes like this "blah blah blah" needs to be organized different, it's hard to follow, but I also noticed a good level of vocabulary and thought flow. Not to treat it too much like an english assignment, haha =^.^= I liked it.
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