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A self insert story that anyone can place themselves in, your real life self or any character you want. Hopefully you can enjoy the process of raising a magical hoop slowly up your body, experiencing what it's like to magically (and permanentley) turn into a big, fat blimpy cartoon yoshi
Really enjoyed writing this one and it's the longest story I've done. Was very apprehensive of posting such a long piece up but everyone who's read it seems to enjoy it so be sure to tell me what you think <3
Inspired by a wonderful piece from
eileensamoyed
Really enjoyed writing this one and it's the longest story I've done. Was very apprehensive of posting such a long piece up but everyone who's read it seems to enjoy it so be sure to tell me what you think <3
Inspired by a wonderful piece from
eileensamoyed
Category Story / Transformation
Species Yoshi
Size 120 x 117px
File Size 10 kB
I really like how you've gone about this. I'm especially enjoying that slight "realism" of the idea that the reader is unable to process how it looks when looking down with the warped perspectives. Really adds a lot to it.
My only real criticism is that punctuation seems to be missing at the end of each paragraph, which does make it look like the sentences are running on a little. Otherwise, though, very nice little story here. o:
My only real criticism is that punctuation seems to be missing at the end of each paragraph, which does make it look like the sentences are running on a little. Otherwise, though, very nice little story here. o:
Ah yeah that's just a habit of mine, didn't realize it was that distracting. Was something I was doing to 'cheat' the character limit of 2k when I just posted my stuff on discord
Well thank you very much for taking the time to read it all. Yeah I was wondering if people would be able to follow the whole weird perspective thing I had in my head but I'm glad it's 'clear'. Was a challenge to describe an optical illusion. I think I was picturing something like those ridiculous looking hige fields of views like this, especially later in the video https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QCPY5R4Myvs
Well thank you very much for taking the time to read it all. Yeah I was wondering if people would be able to follow the whole weird perspective thing I had in my head but I'm glad it's 'clear'. Was a challenge to describe an optical illusion. I think I was picturing something like those ridiculous looking hige fields of views like this, especially later in the video https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QCPY5R4Myvs
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