New story. The point of this one is a sort of futuristic story, but unlike most of my other stories, completely based in what could realistically happen. So no magic whatsoever. This one is designed as a shorter story with a much more constrained plot and follow our protagonist Terrence Knight, a lateral fox that will have to use his wits more than anything to get through the main threat that will come down. Overall story length will only be about 8-9 chapters.
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You write in the wrong tense for the work. Present tense requires something called framing to work well. Your work does not have it. Else wise it becomes a bad form of telling leading to a lot of goofey sentence things really jarring the work. Past tense creates an illusion of happening for a reader and for most stories the best tense to use due to that reason.
Verbs in past tense mainly end in ed, was instead of is, and some other choices.
EX: Past tense
"Are you really trying to say you're an engineer?" the tiger said, obviously trying to play up the whole built like a tank stereotype of the species.
Terrence watched the tiger continue to stare at him with disapproval, but it's not like it's something Terrence has ever let bother him, he's was used to everyone treating him like that because he had no thumbs he could be nothing more than an invalid.
It makes a big difference for audience readership and flow.
Verbs in past tense mainly end in ed, was instead of is, and some other choices.
EX: Past tense
"Are you really trying to say you're an engineer?" the tiger said, obviously trying to play up the whole built like a tank stereotype of the species.
Terrence watched the tiger continue to stare at him with disapproval, but it's not like it's something Terrence has ever let bother him, he's was used to everyone treating him like that because he had no thumbs he could be nothing more than an invalid.
It makes a big difference for audience readership and flow.
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