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Alright, I've finally gotten my act (and courage) together to post something with this account.
I was given the subject of: "A story which the setting, influences the characters" as part of homework in my English class. This is one of the few stories that I ever felt proud of and thought others might like it.
Thank you.
I was given the subject of: "A story which the setting, influences the characters" as part of homework in my English class. This is one of the few stories that I ever felt proud of and thought others might like it.
Thank you.
Category Story / General Furry Art
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 46.5 kB
As an ordinary reader, my comment would be: not bad, not bad. Just one thing, everything seems a bit rushed: you show me all these wonderful scenes and ideas, but they were rather short and... the pace is too fast. I could almost read it like a poem or something. Try to eliminate the minor events and go more in depth into important features, like meeting the wolf and breaking out to meet the main character's allies or whatever.
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