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The start of my new story about a horse that gets captured by lions and fattened for food, its my first anthro story :3
Can anybody suggest a better name for the story? :p
*EDIT .doc file can be found here http://www.furaffinity.net/view/6281814/
Can anybody suggest a better name for the story? :p
*EDIT .doc file can be found here http://www.furaffinity.net/view/6281814/
Category Story / Fat Furs
Species Lion
Size 120 x 90px
File Size 3.9 kB
Then name it Trapped but if you're going to add on to it then you just have to see how things evolve as you go. Often what I'll do is I'll write my entire story, edit, and then put a title on it before I take it live so that way the title stays on the story.
Another thing I do is once I put it live then I do my description because again I do not want to taint my flow I have creating the story. You don't have to rush, it's all on you.
These are just some simple tips I give you to make it go easier.
Another thing I do is once I put it live then I do my description because again I do not want to taint my flow I have creating the story. You don't have to rush, it's all on you.
These are just some simple tips I give you to make it go easier.
It's not a lot to go on yet, but I think you have done the hook quite well. I am interested in seeing what becomes of our equine turned prey.
I wonder though, if an urban setting is best for this situation. It would be a very dark, wartorn place where people of a certain species are tracked down and hunted in the streets. However you could spin the relationship between horse and lion like that of rival gangs, I suppose. I like the tension of dominance and hierarchy between the lions. If you wanted to expand on that, maybe you could change them out for wolves or another species of canid. Lion pride dynamics are, after all, different from wolf pack dynamics. It's just an idea of course.
Looking forward to what happens next.
I wonder though, if an urban setting is best for this situation. It would be a very dark, wartorn place where people of a certain species are tracked down and hunted in the streets. However you could spin the relationship between horse and lion like that of rival gangs, I suppose. I like the tension of dominance and hierarchy between the lions. If you wanted to expand on that, maybe you could change them out for wolves or another species of canid. Lion pride dynamics are, after all, different from wolf pack dynamics. It's just an idea of course.
Looking forward to what happens next.
Hm, and the premise of "Sitting Ducks" never made very much plausible sense did it. I mean those ducks lived in mortal fear of the alligators who basically preyed on them as sport. The natural reaction would be that the two species would be at constant war with each other. That of course, was not the point of the series, however as it basically just concentrated on the two main characters. I just don't think it is rational to think that one group of people would stand idly by while members of their population were hunted down and killed by another group.
Hm? What does that mean exactly? And I wouldn't say that something is "just" a story. Your prose is your art. You don't want to do a sloppy job with the excuse that its not important. You should try your best; your audience - no matter who they are - will appreciate the extra effort in the end.
That's the thing though. To be successful as a story, it needs to draw people in and for that to happen, there needs to be "Suspension of Disbelief." Incongruities and unbelievable material cause the reader to become aware that they are reading a story and breaks the smooth flow of the tale. You should try to proceed logically and in a believable manner when writing so the reader will not stop reading and wonder why things are happening in the certain way you are describing them.
No, of course it doesn't have to be believable. But you should provide an explanation for the current arrangement at some point. Perhaps the lion pride are renegades, disobeying the general law of peace for a rush of excitement. Or maybe they are a gang of unscrupulous teens who are just preying on those who they perceive to be weak. It doesn't have to be a segregated society with horses here and lions there. The city is full of its own dangers, as you and I know, that can be translated to a place populated by anthropomorphic denizens.
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