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Star Wars: Beasts of the Stars - Part 1
by Ghost.Wolf99
Writer and potential artist.
2 years ago
Garm Lykos, a Shistavanen farmer, steals an imperial shuttle after his farm was confiscated by the Empire for Khyber mining.
I'm sorry for the lag between uploads. I hope everyone enjoys it.
I'm sorry for the lag between uploads. I hope everyone enjoys it.
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A crisp and well written chapter, easy to follow even for a non native english speaker like me, without any lengths. You come straight to the point, where the story takes place, you root it allready into the franchise of SW with the mentioning of the Exogorth worm living in asteroids and the hint with the Cantina scenario from Sw 4 A new Hope.
I am looking forward to your next chapter. Garm Lykos appears to be an interesting young Shistavanen.
Well done job on the debute here.
It would be cool, if you could describe your Shistavanen hero a little bit more detailed in terms of design next time. But don´t do it as a simple description. It is far more interesting, if the description is embedded into the story. For example, he is described through the inner thoughts of a second person present at the moment or maybe he could pass a mirror or mirroring surface to take a look on himself for a moment, perhaps in a moment of reminiscing things, that have happened in the past.