Well a end to a end to a interesting story. Nothing quite like it. Like the arm bit. Its those small details that help. Good job not putting things to waste in your scheme.

Thanks, glad you enjoy it, is there any changes I need to make?

Sorry, you didn't hit the actual reply button so I didn't see this (I do this often). Hard to critique poetry due to its nature. Edits go a long way. Have some dialogue not in "". A good story poem thrives in its poetic description and how things look like over what is happening. Still, so many styles and thus is the nature of poetry. So if this is what you want to do, then it is fine.

Quick questio: if I take out the " will people still know which character is talking? This was something I was expermenting with something new, didn't know if it people would be interested in reading or not. I'm still growing as a writer.

Thanks, I'll take that in mind.

Quick questio: if I take out the " will people still know which character is talking? This was something I was expermenting with something new, didn't know if it work or not. I'm still growing as a writer.