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Story.Part III

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posted 14 years ago Watcher

Finally something furry :P
Will put the next part when I'll finish it!
Also hoping for some feedback...
おねがいします

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14 years ago

You have good natural description, however, your characterization lacks. You are also dialogue heavy, more action description and time spent towards your rhetorical purpose per chapter may help what world come to life.
Best of luck with the rest.

JBKYuuBi ~jbkyuubi

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14 years ago

Thank you very much for your comment, I'll try my best.

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