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This is my first story that have have completely written. It involves my two sonas, Leif and Ky. This serves as an introduction to them, and there general dynamic. Leif is the fursona while Ky is the human sona i have. I would like to have constructive feedback to help me improve my writing abilities.
Question: Would you like to see a Tf story next or a weight gain or muscle growth story?
Question: Would you like to see a Tf story next or a weight gain or muscle growth story?
Category Story / Transformation
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File Size 143.9 kB
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Fun story. I enjoyed it!
One thing I noticed is that a lot of the sentence structure started the same "He did..", "He grabbed..", "He looked...", etc. even using his name, Leif, instead of he every once in a while could be a nice change.
I also like the idea it's a shampoo he uses in the shower. Cleansing his body and becoming who he wants to be is nice motif and theme. I vote for weight gain next personally.
One thing I noticed is that a lot of the sentence structure started the same "He did..", "He grabbed..", "He looked...", etc. even using his name, Leif, instead of he every once in a while could be a nice change.
I also like the idea it's a shampoo he uses in the shower. Cleansing his body and becoming who he wants to be is nice motif and theme. I vote for weight gain next personally.
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