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A fairy tale is a lie, but there's a hint in it^•^
A poem is dedicated to my fav band "Korol I Shut" (The King and the Jester), one of the most listened band in Russia that reaches top 5 by total listens every month despite ceased to exist in 2013.
As was said in news when its leader died: "Each song is a unique journey into the world of fairy tales and ballads. Evil witches and valiant knights, beautiful princesses and ruthless bandits, evil spirits, werewolves and vampires - all this could be met in the worlds created by the legendary rock band The King and the Jester.
(Songs in mentioning order):
"Ели мясо мужики" (Men were eating meat): https://youtu.be/DySpuVIIewc?si=6LMJjz-b5fNSvWi0
"Дурак и молния" (A fool and a lighting): https://youtu.be/W5QZ85TuAio?si=PfRp5e6Oz8NNOA3g
"Мертвый анархист" (Dead anarchist): https://youtu.be/dDqqq8IMUvQ?si=NqKkH5L4zAytO03s
"Два вора и монета" (Two thieves and a Coin): https://youtu.be/ruBZrA5cZmQ?si=9j2EU1w8PSOYsgYR
"Лесник" (A Forester): https://youtu.be/i7R6_7e10QM?si=7OBtIpbDFfSyrhVq
"Охотник" (A Hunter): https://youtu.be/wx_mPXC7CNs?si=AdzBZeAxrXWjgpG9
For those interested for English covers and translations, ask in comments or notes.
A poem is dedicated to my fav band "Korol I Shut" (The King and the Jester), one of the most listened band in Russia that reaches top 5 by total listens every month despite ceased to exist in 2013.
As was said in news when its leader died: "Each song is a unique journey into the world of fairy tales and ballads. Evil witches and valiant knights, beautiful princesses and ruthless bandits, evil spirits, werewolves and vampires - all this could be met in the worlds created by the legendary rock band The King and the Jester.
(Songs in mentioning order):
"Ели мясо мужики" (Men were eating meat): https://youtu.be/DySpuVIIewc?si=6LMJjz-b5fNSvWi0
"Дурак и молния" (A fool and a lighting): https://youtu.be/W5QZ85TuAio?si=PfRp5e6Oz8NNOA3g
"Мертвый анархист" (Dead anarchist): https://youtu.be/dDqqq8IMUvQ?si=NqKkH5L4zAytO03s
"Два вора и монета" (Two thieves and a Coin): https://youtu.be/ruBZrA5cZmQ?si=9j2EU1w8PSOYsgYR
"Лесник" (A Forester): https://youtu.be/i7R6_7e10QM?si=7OBtIpbDFfSyrhVq
"Охотник" (A Hunter): https://youtu.be/wx_mPXC7CNs?si=AdzBZeAxrXWjgpG9
For those interested for English covers and translations, ask in comments or notes.
Category Poetry / All
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Size 120 x 117px
File Size 1.7 kB
While the story is interesting, a few sentences are very awkward.
>Blocking off my path's retreat.
>Started running in flee.
>appeared before my looks
I can understand what you meant but these sound unnatural to an English speaker.
The first two should be:
·Blocking off my path of retreat
·I started running/fleeing (you can only have one, else it's redundant)
And the last one should say "before my eyes".
As for the rest... I'll be frank, it can hardly be called a poem. Few lines rhyme well enough for it.
But the story is captivating by itself, so I hardly care. It's a good short story, with many elements of a classic tale.
By the way, there is no point in censoring the 'dumb' in "dumbasses" as 'asses' is the part that is considered offensive.
>Blocking off my path's retreat.
>Started running in flee.
>appeared before my looks
I can understand what you meant but these sound unnatural to an English speaker.
The first two should be:
·Blocking off my path of retreat
·I started running/fleeing (you can only have one, else it's redundant)
And the last one should say "before my eyes".
As for the rest... I'll be frank, it can hardly be called a poem. Few lines rhyme well enough for it.
But the story is captivating by itself, so I hardly care. It's a good short story, with many elements of a classic tale.
By the way, there is no point in censoring the 'dumb' in "dumbasses" as 'asses' is the part that is considered offensive.
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