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This story started out as just a short story, but as I worked on it I kept getting more ideas on things that I wanted to include. The story ended up growing into something much bigger than I'd expected it to. So I've decided to break it up into chapters so that I don't get completely overwhelmed. My plan is to eventually have 4-5 chapters total, and possibly build a larger world around this story.
To be honest I'm a little nervous. This is the first time that I've ever published anything that I've written. I've done my best to proofread and fix any grammar/spelling, but there's always a chance that I missed something. I hope that the story makes sense, and that everyone enjoys it.
Thank you for reading!
To be honest I'm a little nervous. This is the first time that I've ever published anything that I've written. I've done my best to proofread and fix any grammar/spelling, but there's always a chance that I missed something. I hope that the story makes sense, and that everyone enjoys it.
Thank you for reading!
Category Story / Transformation
Species Western Dragon
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 87.6 kB
Listed in Folders
A solid story beginning and certainly very well written. Aric Stormrider, what a portentous name he has for a story like this! Morgana's circumstances really set the stage for her as the damsel in distress, but her circumstances seem to be a little more nuanced than her archetype implies. Guarded by a curse, instead of an actual creature of some kind that can be vanquished.
A few questions that I had. If she knew of the curse, and regretted it befalling Aric, why did she let him in? Is that something we will understand better in the future? I'm guessing her sibling has already met that same fate. At the end she laments the curse, but then speaks about finishing its work. Is she the real villain of the story? So many questions that I look forward to seeing answered! Excellent job getting the reader engaged in wanting to know where it goes from here.
A few questions that I had. If she knew of the curse, and regretted it befalling Aric, why did she let him in? Is that something we will understand better in the future? I'm guessing her sibling has already met that same fate. At the end she laments the curse, but then speaks about finishing its work. Is she the real villain of the story? So many questions that I look forward to seeing answered! Excellent job getting the reader engaged in wanting to know where it goes from here.
Thank you for the feedback!
Morgana’s motives are something that I plan on addressing later in the story, (Hopefully it will make sense when I do). I’ve debated answering some of your questions, but I think I’m going to leave it a mystery. However, one thing that I will divulge is that the next chapter will contain the origin of the name Stormrider.
I hope that the rest of the story will live up to the expectations that I’ve set in this chapter.
Morgana’s motives are something that I plan on addressing later in the story, (Hopefully it will make sense when I do). I’ve debated answering some of your questions, but I think I’m going to leave it a mystery. However, one thing that I will divulge is that the next chapter will contain the origin of the name Stormrider.
I hope that the rest of the story will live up to the expectations that I’ve set in this chapter.
A lovely tale/tail! I've seen the second chapter already, and look forward to future installments. :)
It struck me as amusing when you specifically invoked the Rapunzel trope with:
"He could almost imagine a princess at the top, sending her hair cascading down the side of it for someone to climb."
Then a short time later, remarked at how "out of all the things he’d expected to find in the tower, a woman was not one of them."
In fairness, he probably still wasn't *expecting* a woman. So it's not really a continuity error. XD
Thanks again for posting these up. :)
It struck me as amusing when you specifically invoked the Rapunzel trope with:
"He could almost imagine a princess at the top, sending her hair cascading down the side of it for someone to climb."
Then a short time later, remarked at how "out of all the things he’d expected to find in the tower, a woman was not one of them."
In fairness, he probably still wasn't *expecting* a woman. So it's not really a continuity error. XD
Thanks again for posting these up. :)
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