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This story is between Rex and John, where Rex decides to spice up their lives. Things how ever don't go exactly as Rex had hoped. This story is more on the origins of my characters and takes place in the same world as the first.
This is my second story and it some how longer than the first. As always I encourage feed back, as that how I can improve. I tried to use the feedback from the story in the writing of this one.
Also during the writing of this story i made two characters that i would like to know what furry you would like to see them become. Tate is the first one, and one of my friends suggested a deer of some sort, then the next is Isaac. Also would you like to see them in some sort of relationship?
Also for the next story might be a weight gain one but that depends on how you like Tate and Isaac.
This is my second story and it some how longer than the first. As always I encourage feed back, as that how I can improve. I tried to use the feedback from the story in the writing of this one.
Also during the writing of this story i made two characters that i would like to know what furry you would like to see them become. Tate is the first one, and one of my friends suggested a deer of some sort, then the next is Isaac. Also would you like to see them in some sort of relationship?
Also for the next story might be a weight gain one but that depends on how you like Tate and Isaac.
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Lovely! Definitely an improvement in my eyes about the sentence structure! I love proposals, always really cute!
Since you're still asking for feedback, I'd next say is dialogue. It's totally fine to have back to back lines of dialogue, but consider throwing in a "Tate said" or "John said" to remind the reader which line is whose every few quotes.
You're doing great! My vote, if the next one is a weight gain, is that Issac becomes a boar!
Since you're still asking for feedback, I'd next say is dialogue. It's totally fine to have back to back lines of dialogue, but consider throwing in a "Tate said" or "John said" to remind the reader which line is whose every few quotes.
You're doing great! My vote, if the next one is a weight gain, is that Issac becomes a boar!
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