Ah this one is better very beautiful work

thanks ^////^

I like most of it.
Honestly, the ending really turns me off. And please don't take that as " I HATE YUR WURK HURRR ". No, I'm not saying that. The transition wasn't too good, I think it happened almost to awkwardly and fast. around 1:22... You changed the bass to be a harsh tone, and it didn't really mix with the main pad. Now, here's just a suggestion... you could have dropped the bass for 1 whole pass of the pad, and THEN dropped it into the bass with the drums. That would have been a softer transition, because once you get to 1:22 and change the tone, the pad and the bass just make me go... unhappy. Although once the pad leaves, I'm left with some sort of DNB. You should try to improve the last 40 seconds or so. And by that I mean, make it change every once in a while. maybe add another bass... change the tone of it every once in a while... something c:

and it would be really cool, is at the very end, you drop the dnb for just a few seconds, long enough for one pass of the pad you had in the beginning to play and then fade to NOTHING.


Otherwise It is a really good piece of work, which could be REALLY awesome, just needs a little fine tuning!

i'm still new to this ^^; I agree it needs to be fixed more. Hopefully with my new headphones i'll be able the hear the tones and pitches better.

:P
- huggu -
Well, keep on trying!

will do ^^ i'll fix this when i get my headphones. since i have ipod ones which are half broken