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A man wakes up with no knowledge of where he is or what is to come. It's something I had wanted to write for a while but got stuck on how to do it. I hope you like it.
Category Story / Transformation
Species Western Dragon
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 39.5 kB
The description in this story is pretty darn good, but the way you frame how he is restrained is excellent. It really drives home how he's stuck, how he's upside down. The tf isn't bad at all. Only one word through me off.
When he did so, he felt the harness beginning to spread throughout his body
I think 'over' or 'across' or something might work better. If the harness is actually penetrating his body rather than covering it, you might want to expand that to two or three sentences just to convey the idea.
Other than the one word choice issue, very well done.
When he did so, he felt the harness beginning to spread throughout his body
I think 'over' or 'across' or something might work better. If the harness is actually penetrating his body rather than covering it, you might want to expand that to two or three sentences just to convey the idea.
Other than the one word choice issue, very well done.
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