Even if it took a long time since the previous publication!
I finally managed to finish the end of the beginning of my story! I hope that everyone who reads it will leave a comment and share their thoughts about what they read!
I know it turned out to be short, but due to some circumstances, I can't write more than in my other works!
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Looking at how quickly her sworn enemies and those who could create problems for her in the future fell, Innanna was literally happy to the depths of her dark perverted soul! She had been imprisoned in this piece of stone for more than 2000 years, and now she was free and could sow house as she wanted! And the first thing she was going to do was vent all that hatred, bitterness, and resentment at Celestia, her sister, and everyone else she was involved with! And it would have been all right, but there was a problem that even with all her strength she could not solve.
Using her "divine instinct", Innanna could see or rather feel everything that was happening hundreds of kilometers away so clearly that it could not but inspire horror! A representative of the house saw how the "believers" who blindly worshipped her put the plan into effect in other cities! They spread a "purple mist" that spread rapidly and put the "weak ponies" into a "hypnotic trance state." While the believers themselves, using the "gifted" power of the Goddess, literally removed key figures who were designated in the list as "heretics" and could cause problems!
Unknowingly, the active members of the cult themselves in these very nearby cities were under "magical control" with shining purple eyes and therefore committed such a thing without any regrets and remorse! They blindly went to such things, confident that this is how they "save" those who can still be saved from the influence of the "titans"! While they dealt with the "heretics" quickly and without delay.
They used the so-called "purification", although in fact the cult members used mind magic to put everyone who was on the "list" into a trance state and took them somewhere under guard!
Now Innanna has a serious problem. Where to put so many ponies?! Of course, the list was huge, there was no need to even hide it! The first thing she wanted to do was deal with Celestia, who was currently lying with the others on the balcony of the new palace. But now, looking at everything that was happening outside the capital, she had more and more doubts about the tactics of the "blitzkrieg".
Acting too quickly could lead to future consequences! Although she knew about Vitania's caution and her careful planning in case of an emergency. Innanna couldn't get rid of that damned feeling of insecurity that appeared after the first battle with Celestia and Luna! Even the fact that she had them in her hands right now did not allow her to completely get rid of this damn feeling!
Back when they first met, the house representative appreciated the princesses and was confident in her abilities as she was at the peak of her abilities! Unfortunately, this turned out not to be the case, because they managed to defeat her and seal her! After spending 2,000 years trapped in stone, Innanna was no longer going to step on the same rake twice and was no longer going to rely on flair or strength assessment! Now she was only interested in facts and detailed information! Therefore, the representative of the house decided to do so. Without any doubt, she kept the entire cult under the spell of "magical control" in secret from everyone, even her "high priestess"! No one could lie to her or hide their secret plans or designs.
Everyone who was below the rank of "bishop" was not interested in Innanna, and therefore they were all either a living force or "faceless zombies" devoid of any desires or will, just "dolls". The rest, who held higher positions, were those who managed all the affairs and exploited the entire "working" system! Even if their mental abilities were influenced by the control of a house representative, but not so much making him more reasonable and not mentally retarded. By making him as loyal as the others, but able to think and make the right decisions, Innanna hoped to get direct supervisors capable of leadership.
Right now, watching what was happening outside the capital, she reasoned to herself while her insane amount of magical energy, which the cult members perceived as "divine", raged around!
- The goddess? Vitania said with a stutter and obvious concern on her face. The unicorn was scared by the raging energy! Of course, she had dealt with her before, but even in the very space in which she used to communicate with the goddess through the "bible" she was not so much!
The magical energy itself was literally raging everywhere! Noticing this, Innanna immediately took control of her and, adhering to the role she had created in the faces of the "believers," said: "I'm sorry, child. I spent two thousand years in that terrible space, and that's why my divine energy behaves like this after liberation! To be honest, even for a deity like me, it's very difficult to control her fully right now. I want to deal with what my "stupid" daughters have done during this time as soon as possible, but I have to accept this fact as an urgent matter! I have to regain control of her as soon as possible, otherwise when they wake up they will start to run amok. Vitania, I have to put on your shoulders the reins of temporary government and management of the whole country until I recover and deal with my daughters!"
- I swear to you, "Goddess Great Mother"! I will fulfill my sacred duty and restore everything according to your wishes! The unicorn said fanatically.
- Then before I leave! For your faith and efforts, I will reward you with this! The eyes of the giant alicorn glowed bright purple and an impossibly huge amount of magical energy literally gushed out of Innanna's fake body in a frenzied fountain.
The energy began to flow into the body of Vitania and literally after a couple of minutes it began to grow! Vitania felt strong changes in her body! On the one hand, it seemed that it should have caused pain and other sensations, but apart from a slight discomfort, Vitania did not feel anything else! Soon, her body began to grow along with her horn, and when she could be compared to a full-length Celestia, majestic wings suddenly grew behind her back! Her dark purple mane, shimmering in three different shades and her tail fluttering in the wind, grew to an incredible size! Her cutie mark began to resemble a scepter, whose main decoration was the statue of an eye.
Now Vitania could be compared to alicorn! She herself felt that undeniable power in her new body! Until now, a child that could be compared to an 18-year-old pony who is the head of the cult and the main "priestess" did not inspire confidence to the members of the cult of confidence who had just entered the path of faith! This also applied to others, but already at the top of the cult's power! But now Vitania is feeling the magical energy that literally flowed through the veins of her body and what is most important for her is the necessary growth in order to rise above everyone else!
- This power is not a weapon or a way to destroy your enemies! Innanna's cold and at the same time calm voice interrupted Vitania's hot excitement. Seeing the shocked face of the young priestess, the giant alicorn continued: "The power I have given you should serve as a way for you to control power both in the capital itself and beyond! Try not to get drunk on her like it happened to my daughters." - Innanna's magical power picked up Celestia, Luna, Mane six and representatives of the Crystal Empire. Going to heaven: "I hope that you, as the daughter I have recognized, will fully justify yourself."
Having heard something similar from the goddess kom, she worshipped the new alicorn Vitania could not help but be amazed at what she heard! Pride sounded like bells in her chest! She not only received the "power", but also the very recognition of the goddess! She was in the next world from happiness and could not properly control her emotions, bursting over the edge! Looking at the beautiful sky where her "benefactress" soared deep in her head, she set herself the task that she would do everything in the best possible way!
A week has passed since that very event and during all this time nothing happened in the "former" capital of Canterlot, at least at first glance, because none of the subjects paid attention to what was happening around them or they simply did not notice it, because they were all in the so-called "half-asleep state"! They wandered senselessly around the new city erected on the site of the old one and did what was a daily "routine" for them.
However, they couldn't even think about what was really going on behind their backs and what happened to the last capital of Canterlot!
To be continued....
I finally managed to finish the end of the beginning of my story! I hope that everyone who reads it will leave a comment and share their thoughts about what they read!
I know it turned out to be short, but due to some circumstances, I can't write more than in my other works!
-
Looking at how quickly her sworn enemies and those who could create problems for her in the future fell, Innanna was literally happy to the depths of her dark perverted soul! She had been imprisoned in this piece of stone for more than 2000 years, and now she was free and could sow house as she wanted! And the first thing she was going to do was vent all that hatred, bitterness, and resentment at Celestia, her sister, and everyone else she was involved with! And it would have been all right, but there was a problem that even with all her strength she could not solve.
Using her "divine instinct", Innanna could see or rather feel everything that was happening hundreds of kilometers away so clearly that it could not but inspire horror! A representative of the house saw how the "believers" who blindly worshipped her put the plan into effect in other cities! They spread a "purple mist" that spread rapidly and put the "weak ponies" into a "hypnotic trance state." While the believers themselves, using the "gifted" power of the Goddess, literally removed key figures who were designated in the list as "heretics" and could cause problems!
Unknowingly, the active members of the cult themselves in these very nearby cities were under "magical control" with shining purple eyes and therefore committed such a thing without any regrets and remorse! They blindly went to such things, confident that this is how they "save" those who can still be saved from the influence of the "titans"! While they dealt with the "heretics" quickly and without delay.
They used the so-called "purification", although in fact the cult members used mind magic to put everyone who was on the "list" into a trance state and took them somewhere under guard!
Now Innanna has a serious problem. Where to put so many ponies?! Of course, the list was huge, there was no need to even hide it! The first thing she wanted to do was deal with Celestia, who was currently lying with the others on the balcony of the new palace. But now, looking at everything that was happening outside the capital, she had more and more doubts about the tactics of the "blitzkrieg".
Acting too quickly could lead to future consequences! Although she knew about Vitania's caution and her careful planning in case of an emergency. Innanna couldn't get rid of that damned feeling of insecurity that appeared after the first battle with Celestia and Luna! Even the fact that she had them in her hands right now did not allow her to completely get rid of this damn feeling!
Back when they first met, the house representative appreciated the princesses and was confident in her abilities as she was at the peak of her abilities! Unfortunately, this turned out not to be the case, because they managed to defeat her and seal her! After spending 2,000 years trapped in stone, Innanna was no longer going to step on the same rake twice and was no longer going to rely on flair or strength assessment! Now she was only interested in facts and detailed information! Therefore, the representative of the house decided to do so. Without any doubt, she kept the entire cult under the spell of "magical control" in secret from everyone, even her "high priestess"! No one could lie to her or hide their secret plans or designs.
Everyone who was below the rank of "bishop" was not interested in Innanna, and therefore they were all either a living force or "faceless zombies" devoid of any desires or will, just "dolls". The rest, who held higher positions, were those who managed all the affairs and exploited the entire "working" system! Even if their mental abilities were influenced by the control of a house representative, but not so much making him more reasonable and not mentally retarded. By making him as loyal as the others, but able to think and make the right decisions, Innanna hoped to get direct supervisors capable of leadership.
Right now, watching what was happening outside the capital, she reasoned to herself while her insane amount of magical energy, which the cult members perceived as "divine", raged around!
- The goddess? Vitania said with a stutter and obvious concern on her face. The unicorn was scared by the raging energy! Of course, she had dealt with her before, but even in the very space in which she used to communicate with the goddess through the "bible" she was not so much!
The magical energy itself was literally raging everywhere! Noticing this, Innanna immediately took control of her and, adhering to the role she had created in the faces of the "believers," said: "I'm sorry, child. I spent two thousand years in that terrible space, and that's why my divine energy behaves like this after liberation! To be honest, even for a deity like me, it's very difficult to control her fully right now. I want to deal with what my "stupid" daughters have done during this time as soon as possible, but I have to accept this fact as an urgent matter! I have to regain control of her as soon as possible, otherwise when they wake up they will start to run amok. Vitania, I have to put on your shoulders the reins of temporary government and management of the whole country until I recover and deal with my daughters!"
- I swear to you, "Goddess Great Mother"! I will fulfill my sacred duty and restore everything according to your wishes! The unicorn said fanatically.
- Then before I leave! For your faith and efforts, I will reward you with this! The eyes of the giant alicorn glowed bright purple and an impossibly huge amount of magical energy literally gushed out of Innanna's fake body in a frenzied fountain.
The energy began to flow into the body of Vitania and literally after a couple of minutes it began to grow! Vitania felt strong changes in her body! On the one hand, it seemed that it should have caused pain and other sensations, but apart from a slight discomfort, Vitania did not feel anything else! Soon, her body began to grow along with her horn, and when she could be compared to a full-length Celestia, majestic wings suddenly grew behind her back! Her dark purple mane, shimmering in three different shades and her tail fluttering in the wind, grew to an incredible size! Her cutie mark began to resemble a scepter, whose main decoration was the statue of an eye.
Now Vitania could be compared to alicorn! She herself felt that undeniable power in her new body! Until now, a child that could be compared to an 18-year-old pony who is the head of the cult and the main "priestess" did not inspire confidence to the members of the cult of confidence who had just entered the path of faith! This also applied to others, but already at the top of the cult's power! But now Vitania is feeling the magical energy that literally flowed through the veins of her body and what is most important for her is the necessary growth in order to rise above everyone else!
- This power is not a weapon or a way to destroy your enemies! Innanna's cold and at the same time calm voice interrupted Vitania's hot excitement. Seeing the shocked face of the young priestess, the giant alicorn continued: "The power I have given you should serve as a way for you to control power both in the capital itself and beyond! Try not to get drunk on her like it happened to my daughters." - Innanna's magical power picked up Celestia, Luna, Mane six and representatives of the Crystal Empire. Going to heaven: "I hope that you, as the daughter I have recognized, will fully justify yourself."
Having heard something similar from the goddess kom, she worshipped the new alicorn Vitania could not help but be amazed at what she heard! Pride sounded like bells in her chest! She not only received the "power", but also the very recognition of the goddess! She was in the next world from happiness and could not properly control her emotions, bursting over the edge! Looking at the beautiful sky where her "benefactress" soared deep in her head, she set herself the task that she would do everything in the best possible way!
A week has passed since that very event and during all this time nothing happened in the "former" capital of Canterlot, at least at first glance, because none of the subjects paid attention to what was happening around them or they simply did not notice it, because they were all in the so-called "half-asleep state"! They wandered senselessly around the new city erected on the site of the old one and did what was a daily "routine" for them.
However, they couldn't even think about what was really going on behind their backs and what happened to the last capital of Canterlot!
To be continued....
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Hi! I’m sorry that your going through a writers crisis. I’m currently in a art block moment and I only have ideas because of upcoming holidays. And when they past, I’m in trouble. And also please correct me if I get anything wrong or if I interpret something the wrong way. I’m not the greatest at giving feedback but I’ll tell you what I experienced while reading.
I’ve experienced 2 main things.
1. The hook.
I like how you opened it with the cult and talking about the past. It creates an interesting build up for what’s about to happen.
2. A Mysterious theme.
I liked how mysterious some parts of the story were. The Cult has magical powers to weaken and control others. And we still don’t know what else the members can do.
So what do I think about it. It’s great! I have trouble myself with reading things fully. But I read all of it, which is pretty rare. I like how you described things so it can be easy to imagine the setting. The mysterious elements like the purple fog and energy showing how unpredictable things can get. I overall enjoyed reading this.
I’ve experienced 2 main things.
1. The hook.
I like how you opened it with the cult and talking about the past. It creates an interesting build up for what’s about to happen.
2. A Mysterious theme.
I liked how mysterious some parts of the story were. The Cult has magical powers to weaken and control others. And we still don’t know what else the members can do.
So what do I think about it. It’s great! I have trouble myself with reading things fully. But I read all of it, which is pretty rare. I like how you described things so it can be easy to imagine the setting. The mysterious elements like the purple fog and energy showing how unpredictable things can get. I overall enjoyed reading this.
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