Oof, intense scene.

:)

Wow that's sick (in a good way... lol).

I highly enjoyed reading this! The detail with which you described everything, the characters' conflicted emotions, the upheaval of the company as chaos surrounds them. It's awesome. Good job :)

Thank you so much! It means a lot!

I like blue it’s nice to see the edges be peeled back on the villian to show more depth. Nicely done

Thank you :)

At least no one had to die today. I'd be careful if I were Blue, though. While I might not have the full picture, those workers are sure to retaliate on such a vicious boss!

XD true, a lesson that he'd actually learn very soon. His whole approach was to hire people he found on the streets, without homes, reasons to go on, and down on their luck. He'd take them in, give them homes, and private schooling for kids, and actually take care of them with good health and benefits. He paid less but would actually absorb most living costs into his business model as well as give workers and families an allowance to work with. Those who didn't like the illegal work though would be publicly silenced on a whim, either in a grand fight or a sudden bullet. He is known for his cold and analytical thinking but ruled with a very cruel head.

in this short, I wanted to show the repercussions of such a buildup, especially when someone dear to him and the people around him falls. Instead of smoothing it over, the one who typically did that job is now gone, leaving the wounds to bleed in the work place instead of patching them up. From here, Blue would go on to fight his own gang and let the story unfold with chaos. XD

So ye, the more you know, sorry for the lroe drop, got excited by your comment, it means a lot!

it has a good feel... it could play out nicely...

Vix

Thanks and thank you for the feedback! I'll try and read over stuff before posting XD

A lot of my posts are purely first drafts XD

Yikes! Don't mess with Blue! I do feel like Blue might end up with a sudden case of lead poisoning if he isn't careful though, seems he's pretty short on friends!

XD poisoning would be too kind for him XD

I'm glad you enjoyed his sherade!