Paragraphs:

Need to decide if your doing new or old formating.

New paragraph is easier and just make a fine drop. This includes every change in speaker and new speaker.


Y-you think it's dead?” Kash asked, his lush green eyes unable to shift witness and his
trembling maw simply repeating his witness.

“Of course he is a moron, it's a rotting corpse!” Joel recanted as his head turned in sharp swift
towards the dumbfounded fox. “Maybe poke it with that stick if you really aren’t sure.”

That's it, all you have to do.

such a display created a violent march from his stomach to his throat as the stench assaulted
his nostril. “That’s disgusting, I don’t even know what we wanted from it.”

A crackle from the heavens ruptured, as an angry pour began its barrage on the canopy,


corpse of a corpse, whose previous essence was a source of fury.

The canopy still remains, though unable to shake its greatest test a

Same with subject matters, actors, etc.

Does a lot for readership.

Like the story though. Lot of object in place and reflection. You do loose tense in the final paragraph section when there were no need.

If you want old style, no line breaks and just indent every paragraph instead.

Why are they even arguing?

I think you solidly grasped the meaning of the word... and I commend your working through the translation, which is still a bit rough, but a lot better than I could ever hope for.

Vix

Interesting use of description on the corpse and its changing condition and "circle of life" aspects with nature. And DANG! That was a heck of a long argument there! Eons? Wow!

Unusual and intriguing perspectives!