Haha.. I could hear music playing to this.

.. this is nice. Innocent and heartfelt. Just the slightest bit naive to make it adorable.

Really captures the essence of youth, and a child's fascination with the simple things in life we often forget as we progress in age..

What an encouragingly thoughtful comment, Chark. I do so appreciate your insight on the matter of the poem's childish nature. ^^

I'm glad you could "hear music playing to this"; because I almost always write metrically, I guess you could say it's something I subconsciously strive for. =)

With age comes change right?--most notably the mitigation of one's more carefree days and thus his or hers intrinsically pure-hearted nature. Well, as corny as it sounds, I like to think I've held on to some of that, and I hope to continue retaining it. x3

Thanks again, man. Do take care of yourself. =O

D-Tail....have you sent any of your poems to Children's Magazines?

HAVE YOU?? HAVE YOU?????

Aw, darn, it's Stargazer's pesky yellow nephew again! D8

*hides*

Psssst: "No one's here...."

Stop avoiding the question. *glares*

Beautiful. I think (personally) the total innocence and small words makes it more powerful. :D
The last bit really pulled it together for me. ^u^

*shrinks at intimidating glare* :<

Y-yes...the little words do indeed contribute to the poem's overall strength and conveyed feeling. 8(

Hehe, and I loves me a strong ending. ^^;

I always love reading your poems. I especially liked the last part.

Hehe, I'm admittedly obsessive in regards to strong literary endings. x3

I'm glad to hear of your continual enthusiasm, Moonfir! Thank you very much for always taking the time to read my work. ^^

thats a really nicely written peice, and captures the picture to a T i think :)

Well, such a comment from the commissioner himself means quite a lot to me, my friend. x3

Really though, the pleasure's all mine for being able to effectively capture Jazzy's rendition of your character's innocence in words. ^^

Ah this is just too cute of a poem, but its also lovely as well ^^ the picture also fits in nicely with this.

*holds up a sign saying: Does Do Cute* :3

Your words are most kind, Crystal, and are always taken to heart. =)

I'm glad that I could once again instill happiness in you with my poems. ^^

Ah! The Wolfmur strikes again =P Such a wonderful poem- I'd expect to see this in a children's book!

Ah, if it isn't FA's own resident baby Bloo Roo! x3

Thanks, man; those particular "children's book" comments are really uplifting. Heaven knows I need to look into that. ^^;

Oh, but what a wonderfully buoyant icon you have there, sir! No doubt courtesy of thy Jazz. =)

That was awesome, I loved it! It was very fun to read and really inspiring! I think I have to go write a poem now...

Dawww, well thanks, Bermuda. ^^

It's always nice to know that my verse can touch people's hearts. =)

Oh, and if you'll allow me to digress: "Welcome to FA, sir! I do hope you enjoy this community." =D

As always D you manage to capture the image perfectly. :)
I love the order of the rhyme and the cute imagery too. I'm still surprised you could make something like this from that little picture.
As the above comments say, you really should look into making a book someday. I know I would buy a copy. ^^

Well, Jazz, I'm thoroughly pleased to know that the creator of said image thinks so; I assure you, it's a pleasure to be using your work as a poetic guide to writing something that will bring smiles to those who read it. =D

And yes, I did take some liberty with the rhyme scheme this time around; having the far outer lines rhyme with each other is something I seldom do, but I think it makes for a subtle sound return that's inexplicably enjoyable and appropriate here. ^^

Lastly, saying that you'd buy a copy of a book of my poetry, children themed or otherwise, really means a lot to me, Jazz; I honestly just wish I could bring myself to think that doing so is a practical move. I've steeled myself in thinking that books of poetry (especially of my classic style) in today's world just don't leave a mark. Buuut, maybe I'm being a fool? x3

Thank you all the same, my friend! :)

I'm not sure if its practical (I know printing, selling, and publishing are very expensive) But then again you already leave your mark on many many people just by posting on FA.

Your classic style is refreshing and sweet and I'm positive that everyone who does come across is affected by it. If getting it published is what you really want to do I say don't have any fear about it. Even if it doesn't become a best seller you will still make something great.

Jazzy, I shall take your sincere words (and those of everyone else) to heart. I think it's high time I do take action without "having any fear about it." Though, I will admit that the fears you're thinking of aren't exactly what plague me. STILL, I appreciate the advice! :D

Carry on, Maiden of All Things Adorable. x3

Aww, simply adorable poem. Also an intriguing take on such a simple subject. Well written poem D-Tail. ^^

"Intriguing take on such a simple subject," you say? I hath struck again! x3

And "adorable" tends to be a specialty of mine. ^^;

Thank you for being such a loyal reader, Rai. =)

howd i miss this? its so cute and wonerfully written, i feel bad for just now viewing it :(

I gotta admit, I definitely surprised myself with this one; it's short but immensely powerful in a childishly charming manner. =)

And worry not, Yavy, for I appreciate your acknowledgement nonetheless! :D

Been doing alright, bud?

been doin great, i actually came to your page to see how you were since i hadnt heard from you in awhile
doing good?

Oh...things have been unfortunately hectic but I'm managing and hope to continue managing. ^^;

sometimes thats the best you can do, glad its not to bad

As happy as it gets for those toddler years! ;D

Thanks, Xcos. ^^