If anyone can draw some images for my characters, that would be great. I'm hoping to make a bio on some of the characters

Yo. Remind to come back and read it
Can't on phone

Dude, read my story now. Please comment soon

erk. typed out my whole response, and somehow closed the page. >.< and the past week i've been away from internet.
Anyways, the style felt a little funky. The 1-2-3 structure was part of it, plus i'm sure that it was made for a school assignment. To be honest, the flow and feel of the story reminds me of a story I wrote for school a long time ago...one where I didn't know what to write about, and afterwords realized what I ended up writing had a lot of relevence to me. I don't know if that's the case here, but I'll say that it's not too bad as a story. Could definitely use some editing and expansion, its a bit fast paced. It's not exactly "sit down on my bed and relax while reading" material, not yet anyways.
Glad to see another writer though. Hope my feedback did something for ya, if not at least I got to ramble

Hey, thanks for reading my story. I'm definitely going to fix the story up so it seems more like a slow pace enjoy your time type of story. I'm glad you gave some feedback and it will help with my future pieces

An intresting plot.. Wondering if you will continue

That's what I'm hoping to do. Thanks for being so patient with me. Going through a lot of things at home and at school, but I'm hoping to send you a profile page for my fursona soon. Thanks for reading my story.

^_^ No worries, bro. And it was my pleasure to read you story.

Nice story. I feel this could go under fantasy. What do you think?

Fantasy seems like an appropriate section for it. Thanks for reading it and I hope you can give me some pointers on how to improve my writing.

You need to reply to me or I might not see it. I'll add it to the list.

And I wish I could help critique your work, but I'm not very good at it personally. I can tell you that your doing okay though. A few grammar errors here and there, but nothing serious. I hope to see more from you in the future.

Thank you so much for at least pointing out my grammar errors, it's helpful.

I know. Some people might be offended, but I understand that most writers appreciate critique. It's definitely something I could use more of personally, but anyways.

Feel free to notify me or Brett if you have more to submit, or you could notify us here. I'll be checking in every now and again, so yeah. I hope to see more from you in the future.