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Alright, this just popped into my head this afternoon and I typed it out as I went. Short story that might evolve, depending on how it goes over. Hope you like it.
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very nicely done! there are some issues you could deal with, such as using more appropriate terms for the heart, maybe saying the valve had ruptured or such. also try to organize your paragraphs a little bit more. but the point still gets across and its a nice little piece so far!
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