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Zavish searches for a certain woman, making sure that she won't cause him any trouble, but is surprised to see her completely changed.
A personal story.
A personal story.
Category Story / All
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 86.4 kB
Listed in Folders
I read your story and I really liked the concept and the characters, especially the interaction between Zavish and Ceinwen. The atmosphere and worldbuilding are interesting.
I did notice there are a few areas where some details could be expanded or clarified to make the story even stronger. There are also a couple of moments where the pacing feels a bit rushed.
I have a few ideas and thoughts that might help improve or develop some parts of the story. If you are open to it, I would be happy to share them with you.
I did notice there are a few areas where some details could be expanded or clarified to make the story even stronger. There are also a couple of moments where the pacing feels a bit rushed.
I have a few ideas and thoughts that might help improve or develop some parts of the story. If you are open to it, I would be happy to share them with you.
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