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Three Horned King Excerpt, "Defending His Brother's Honor"
This is an excerpt from a story I am attempting to write, it is a possible scene, depending on whether I keep this story first person or third person, and either limited, omniscient, or just objective. But drafting stage is the best stage to make changes. Let me know if this is something you would like more of, if you read it and like it!
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Dragon (Other)
Size 114 x 120px
File Size 1.32 MB
wow that was really cool! quite compelling story, and honestly would love to read more of what's going on here
i was honestly a bit hearbroken reading that three horns might've legitimately been dead. though of course, trusting anything ram horns would say confidently would always be a gamble
also im glad to read actual dialogue from ram horns, truly one of those villains you can't get enough of for sure!
awesome writing overall, i hoesntly didn't feel any sort of specific perspecptive being used, it all flowed so well and seamless
i must also confess i've had many questions about the inner workings of this world/story, and have wondered about the mundanities / bureacracy and inner workings that a kingdom ruled by ram horns might look like. I woult think ram horns would detest things like signed documents and agreements and would lean heavily on another like the scribe to take care of all these kinds of things
fascinating to read more into this story and look forward to any future scenes you might post! well done :3
i was honestly a bit hearbroken reading that three horns might've legitimately been dead. though of course, trusting anything ram horns would say confidently would always be a gamble
also im glad to read actual dialogue from ram horns, truly one of those villains you can't get enough of for sure!
awesome writing overall, i hoesntly didn't feel any sort of specific perspecptive being used, it all flowed so well and seamless
i must also confess i've had many questions about the inner workings of this world/story, and have wondered about the mundanities / bureacracy and inner workings that a kingdom ruled by ram horns might look like. I woult think ram horns would detest things like signed documents and agreements and would lean heavily on another like the scribe to take care of all these kinds of things
fascinating to read more into this story and look forward to any future scenes you might post! well done :3
Hey!! I'm glad you liked it :D
And yeah, trusting Ram Horns is never a sure thing, truth is not his forte. Even when he thinks he tells the truth.
Glad you liked his dialogue, I am still figuring it out, this scene was kind of a "test run" of his characters presence. Ram Horns is a complicated character, to be sure. If this scene stays in the story, I am sure it will be modified in some ways as the character develops!
I have been creating notes about the inner workings of the bureaucracy/inner workings of the command structure, but I can tell you right off the bat that you are correct, ram horns does not much like agreements, treaties, etc. The scribe has convinced him of most of the usefulness of these agreements. Without the scribe, he would likely break these treaties.
Dragons are not prone to bureaucracy either, in general they are too proud and too powerful to be bogged down by paperwork, they mostly exist as representative of a dragons power. If the dragon who has written an agreement is not powerful, the agreement will probably not be honored.
Another important thing is, at this point in the story, the king still believes that he is good. That is one reason he humors the scribe. If he starts to believe himself to be evil, that unleashes a whole new beast.
If you want me to send you more personal notes about the story, I would be totally willing, just let me know!
And yeah, trusting Ram Horns is never a sure thing, truth is not his forte. Even when he thinks he tells the truth.
Glad you liked his dialogue, I am still figuring it out, this scene was kind of a "test run" of his characters presence. Ram Horns is a complicated character, to be sure. If this scene stays in the story, I am sure it will be modified in some ways as the character develops!
I have been creating notes about the inner workings of the bureaucracy/inner workings of the command structure, but I can tell you right off the bat that you are correct, ram horns does not much like agreements, treaties, etc. The scribe has convinced him of most of the usefulness of these agreements. Without the scribe, he would likely break these treaties.
Dragons are not prone to bureaucracy either, in general they are too proud and too powerful to be bogged down by paperwork, they mostly exist as representative of a dragons power. If the dragon who has written an agreement is not powerful, the agreement will probably not be honored.
Another important thing is, at this point in the story, the king still believes that he is good. That is one reason he humors the scribe. If he starts to believe himself to be evil, that unleashes a whole new beast.
If you want me to send you more personal notes about the story, I would be totally willing, just let me know!
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