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Honor of the Brave: Chapter 0: The Change and War of the Sha
This is the current rough draft I have for the introductory chapter of what I hope to be a long running series I'm titling Honor of the Brave. To date (and despite my asking for help), this is all my own work.
I haven't even finished what the Change fully did to the population, nor enough emphasis on just what the death toll during that time period was, but once I finally get a new place, I might be able to pick up the flag and charge headlong into new writer's blocks and hopefully have something to replace anything that's in between greater-than and less-than symbols, and maybe actually get on what the War of the Shattering is.
If you have comments, please give me some feedback. If you really like a certain part, or thought it was total junk, let me know so I may either get a must needed self-esteem boost or find a way to improve my writing style. To fore-warn, I'll most likely not put in any yiff into my work just yet, but I'm not going to just out and say it won't ever happen.
UPDATE 11/15/2011: The file has been lost and I don't have access to the only computer with it, so this is actually scrap so far. Hopefully I'll have it remedied soon. So for now it's adequately in the scraps area.
UPDATE 11/17/2011: Got the PC back up and running and now has the file up, even fixed a few issues so it's nice-ish. Ran into a continuity issue and now trying to find ways of fixing it now.
UPDATE 03/27/2012: Ok, this might be the last time I'll update under this title, but I fixed the continuity issue so it flows so much better and explains more. Still looking for a new title, but thanks to Emergency Medical Technician training, I'm not getting any additional work done on this project. Not only does that annoy me, but it also means I've gotten less time for my other, more active projects. At least I'm not falling behind in those... Hopefully I'll have this chapter done before the actual Leonid Meteor Shower this year, but I'm not counting on anything just yet.
I haven't even finished what the Change fully did to the population, nor enough emphasis on just what the death toll during that time period was, but once I finally get a new place, I might be able to pick up the flag and charge headlong into new writer's blocks and hopefully have something to replace anything that's in between greater-than and less-than symbols, and maybe actually get on what the War of the Shattering is.
If you have comments, please give me some feedback. If you really like a certain part, or thought it was total junk, let me know so I may either get a must needed self-esteem boost or find a way to improve my writing style. To fore-warn, I'll most likely not put in any yiff into my work just yet, but I'm not going to just out and say it won't ever happen.
UPDATE 11/15/2011: The file has been lost and I don't have access to the only computer with it, so this is actually scrap so far. Hopefully I'll have it remedied soon. So for now it's adequately in the scraps area.
UPDATE 11/17/2011: Got the PC back up and running and now has the file up, even fixed a few issues so it's nice-ish. Ran into a continuity issue and now trying to find ways of fixing it now.
UPDATE 03/27/2012: Ok, this might be the last time I'll update under this title, but I fixed the continuity issue so it flows so much better and explains more. Still looking for a new title, but thanks to Emergency Medical Technician training, I'm not getting any additional work done on this project. Not only does that annoy me, but it also means I've gotten less time for my other, more active projects. At least I'm not falling behind in those... Hopefully I'll have this chapter done before the actual Leonid Meteor Shower this year, but I'm not counting on anything just yet.
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Ok, this is up to date, but I've gotten stuck on a certain spot about certain details. The whole "I forgot to describe/explain something, and now would probably fit, but putting it earlier could work as well, but I'm not sure how do convey certain points about certain things while giving enough to sate imaginations without going overboard," deal. I don't know if it's writer's block or just poor outlining. (Honestly I haven't outlined a thing.)
I will not be updating this file, there will simply a newer one with one hell of a shorter name... The title to this was supposed to be "Honor of the Brave: Chapter 0: The Change and War of the Shattering; <insert upload date here>", but Notepad/Wordpad just doesn't want to go that far with it's filename/titles, and Furaffinity agrees, so I'm open to suggestions on this prequel chapter.
Oh, another point. If you were wondering, the conflict described here is NOT the War of the Shattering, the John Hopkins blast and Martin Community Hospital siege (sorry that I didn't finish it, but the previously stated issue keeps me from completing that paragraph) are/were classified as peacekeeping engagements from domestic terrorism, which does not count as an actual war. That will come later (not too much later, but later) and involve something I think some people will hate me for. (Not exactly sure, but it makes for a good plot line...)
Suggestions, comments, just telling me my writing sucks so badly that you'll want to come blow my brains out, worshiping the very text I wrote because it was so mindbogglingly amazing that you've contracted a shrine to this cause (I don't believe so, but anything can happen, especially the stuff that scares me), I don't care. I WANT FEEDBACK! I'm doing this because I think others will like it, and I want to know my weak points so I can either work around them or make then stronger, my strengths so that I can just feel good about something I did. Feedback also gives me more incentive to actually complete this little personal project, to either spite my death-glaring critics, or to appease the hordes of swooning fans. (Again, expecting more of the former and fewer of the latter.) Don't worry about my feelings, when I put this online, I actually put it on the line knowing what could happen and I've prepared for as much as the worse as I could. (Still working on that 20 mile No-Fly Zone around my apartment.) If anything, you'll make me a better writer, so to quote a hit song, "hit me with your best shot."
I will not be updating this file, there will simply a newer one with one hell of a shorter name... The title to this was supposed to be "Honor of the Brave: Chapter 0: The Change and War of the Shattering; <insert upload date here>", but Notepad/Wordpad just doesn't want to go that far with it's filename/titles, and Furaffinity agrees, so I'm open to suggestions on this prequel chapter.
Oh, another point. If you were wondering, the conflict described here is NOT the War of the Shattering, the John Hopkins blast and Martin Community Hospital siege (sorry that I didn't finish it, but the previously stated issue keeps me from completing that paragraph) are/were classified as peacekeeping engagements from domestic terrorism, which does not count as an actual war. That will come later (not too much later, but later) and involve something I think some people will hate me for. (Not exactly sure, but it makes for a good plot line...)
Suggestions, comments, just telling me my writing sucks so badly that you'll want to come blow my brains out, worshiping the very text I wrote because it was so mindbogglingly amazing that you've contracted a shrine to this cause (I don't believe so, but anything can happen, especially the stuff that scares me), I don't care. I WANT FEEDBACK! I'm doing this because I think others will like it, and I want to know my weak points so I can either work around them or make then stronger, my strengths so that I can just feel good about something I did. Feedback also gives me more incentive to actually complete this little personal project, to either spite my death-glaring critics, or to appease the hordes of swooning fans. (Again, expecting more of the former and fewer of the latter.) Don't worry about my feelings, when I put this online, I actually put it on the line knowing what could happen and I've prepared for as much as the worse as I could. (Still working on that 20 mile No-Fly Zone around my apartment.) If anything, you'll make me a better writer, so to quote a hit song, "hit me with your best shot."
Ok, I might make a liar out of myself, because after transfering it over to a Wordpad type program, I suddenly realised that although I was able to convey most of the ideas I wanted, there were so many mistakes made that I remembered I was half asleep every time I worked on it. (Like I am now.) So I might update it without a title change and leave any forward progress until either someone gives me a better title or I get enough creativity and free time to just come up with a new one myself.
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