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WARNING: I STOLE YOUR CLOTHES WHILE YOU _WERE_ LOOKING

Indeed...

Haven't read any further than about 3/4 of the way through the history of the "twins" so far... and I gotta say that the reason for that is that the 'overview' narrative style going on for so long got kinda boring. I know excellent things are to come, but for right now I am too tired to push on to them.

Well, it IS 5:20 in the morning...

About halfway through... But my batteries are dying,(both literally and metaphorically) so I'll comment more about this awesomeness in the morning.

Also... Your writing is made of pure bliss. Seriously.

Overall, EXCELLENT...

I have one major gripe... they had Beatrix in the palm of their hands and they committed a sin... the same sin as was the last major one of hers to be revealed. The one she had been committing almost since the beginning of her life. I mean I know going the way they did had some real advantages but STILL! So much suffering could have been stopped if they had just held it off as long as possible... a video tape sent to the authorities would have been almost as good for hurting The Project as a whole...


One minor gripe: Having Benjamin not only go with the group he did, but carry the envelope was about the stupidest tactical decision I have ever seen... I guess if they had to deal with a key-pad lock he could have gotten them past it, but that was about it. The envelope was just inexcusable... ANYONE would have been a better choice for it than him.

Please forgive them their tactical errors. They're kids; this kinda stuff is new to them. For instance: If they'd had a more nonchalant attitude when passing off the cell phone, or if Brad had simply given it back to Alf himself, Clifford may never have noticed that little tidbit.

Well, that covers the second problem... not the first one quite so much... although the one person in the know who WASN'T a kid also had some SERIOUSLY distorted judgment on the issue.

First off, I'm still not entirely sure what you think they should have done with Beatrix.

And Secondly; you can see forever with hindsight. I thought myself while writinging this; 'Oh, this character SHOULD have done this'. But then I'd think, 'Wait; if I didn't think of it then, they probably wouldn't either. No living being exists without making mistakes.' Karen was forced into a situation where it was 'act now or die', and I think she did a damn fine job.

1.) Snuck her into as many hospitals as possible.

2.) There was a LITTLE time to think about this particular aspect of things since almost everything else had been wrapped up by the time it came into play. Jimmy even goes so far as to describe how terrible it is that she failed to act in that regard. It also would have made a good argument in the debate over what to do with her. Still it was only a LITTLE time, so I guess it is somewhat logical.

P.S. Then again you might SOMEHOW work this into the last part...

It will be described _exactly_ why they couldn't sneak Beatrix into any hospitals in Book Six.

Ah... never mind then.

Another thing too; The other kids *have* to keep Benjamin with them because the envelope isn't what's really important. Ben's brain is. He's the backup. Even if the list got lost or destroyed, he could still make another one; as many as they need. And who knows what else he's got up there?

I agree on the relative values of the envelope versus Ben himself... and that makes it all the more beleivable that they would make that/those mistake(s). Keeping him with the strong but on the front lines instead of in the 'rear ranks' is a judgment call. "Putting all their eggs in one basket" was still an 'Oops'.

*shrugs* Again; they're kids.

More carnage than...

...something with a lot of carnage.

Still, though. This is my favorite chapter so far. Awesome, AWESOME job.

Some of the best writing advice I've ever heard: "Create real, believable characters that the reader will love, and then put them through the most hellish ordeals imaginable." Of course, I'd add to that; '...but always make sure they come through safely, to learn from the experience.'

Some particularly good points:
I like how two of the characters discovered completely new aspects of their gifts this episode.

There's no limit to what you can do if you don't know you can't do it. ;)

Im just glad all those kids made it ok. *hugs Alex*

I'd never let anything happen to the li'l furballs. I love 'em too much. :)

Every lil character you create is lovable.......and yiffable too.

They most certainly ARE NOT. Not for another eight years, at least.

Unless you're talking about Monsoon, Doctor Jones, or one of the other staff members of partental people. Or Beatrix.

Monsoon definately. Hes hot. Dr Jones is a lil to old for me. And as for Beatrix.....id probably get her drunk first!

Never mind that guy! They can all be plenty yiffable in your imagination. I'm not one of these authors who minds people dreaming up naughty fantasies about my characters. ;)

Thats why i luv ya! ~smoochies the fox~

And we know you; you're all about the happy yiffy fun time: behind the scenes, Holly and Tyler are totally hot 'n' heavy with each other. And anyone walking by the bedroom door would be driven insane by the such exchanges as "Go fart some more bats, you look like the bride of Frankenstein." "You say such wonderful things--guess that makes you the Frankenstein monster yourself." "Well I did get zapped with lightning and later came to life..."

...Whereas any attempt to do nasty forceful things results in getting beaten to death by an eight-year-old kitten. :3

I giggled so hard I may have peed. Thanks! ^__^

Holly _needs_ one of those "I'm so goth I shit bats" shirts.

You're welcome! And yes, she does.

What do you mean "nevermind that guy"? Ya' better mind me. Mind your manners, and your *check birthdays* elders. Whippersnapper.

On second thought, sure, nevermind me. Alfador brought my here. Nice to Internet-meet you.

Mind over matter. Hence, to my mind, you don't matter.

*smartass grin that could shatter glass*

Eeeheehee! Awesome! That was perfect! I love it when a plan goes to hell, and I'm glad everyone ended up okay.

So, is this the end of the story, or the beginning of another? Will there be an epilogue?

Oh my yes; keep an eye out for Book Six next monday.

Ah, Good :) I hope we get to see Brad's mom some more. I like her

Well... Unfortunately no. But rest assured, they do get to see each other again and much hugging occurs. ^__^

Y'know, Alex, I finally realized why it is that I like you as a writer. The fact that you can take something so impossibly impossible and turn it not just into a story, but a freaking MASTERPIECE is readliy apparent to me now. I'm reminded of the Star Wars book series, "The New Jedi Order" when I read this stuff, and realize that I feel the same way about it ending: saddened that it's almost over, but happy in a way. It's not yet a happily ever after, but knowing you, you'll make it work beautifully.

Having just completed 18-plus hours of driving, this was an AWESOME way to relax afterwards.

BTW, I "HELLS YEAH!!!!"'ed when Ruby beat the bejesus out of Thurston. Nicely done, my friend. Nicely done. I pray that one day I can be as great of a writer as you are. ;)

I _totally_ know that screaming-at-the-book 'How DARE You Be Over!!!' feeling. Of course, there is a bit more in Book Six. I can never resist tying up loose ends and indulging in gratuitous fanservice. :)

That whole part in the quiet room with Karen, Tyler, Ruby and Thurston was some of the most emotionally volatile writing I've ever done. I forced myself to feel that much fear and rage in order to write about it truly. This part convinced me I really could finish everything else. (I nearly gave up on this one for almost a year, y'know)

I know the feeling. Having been through a few emo-coasters myself, I know the feeling of just giving up on writing for a bit, then feelin interested again. I am very glad that you decided to share this story and its characters to the world, Alex.

It once again proves that you can pretty much make a story out of anything, and not only have it make sense, but be hilarious, compelling, and breathtaking all at the same time.

Besides, gratuitous fanservice is what makes the world go round, specially here on FA. So, Alex, from one writer to another, more gooder writer (I know it's grammatically incorrect, sue me! :P ), I personally cannot wait to se what you have in store for us with the last chapter and your other stories when they come out.

I humbly bow to the master and start making with the worshipping and donations-collectin'.

Thankyew, thankyew! ;)

...so... did you incur any dental bills from chewing at least one keyboard in half?

So yeah I actually had people in my house wondering why I'd just yelled "FUCK YEAH"

And your writing is usually so emotionally charged.

Almost a year? You mean you're not writing this on the spot? Damn you and your serial release format! Damn you, Charles Dickens! *fist-shake*

Really? LOL! That's awesome!

Oh, yeah. This took very close to two years, interrupted by a family trauma and an actual nervous breakdown and subsequent trip to the very mental hospital that had inspired quite a bit of DL's 'sets'. Horrific at the time, but it certainly ended up adding a LOT to Books Five and Six!

I'm glad you're insane now then.:)

Friggen awesome mr.reynard...something that deserves a 10 chainsaw salute!

VRRRRRN!!! VRRRRRRNNNNNN!!!

I mean seriously..you should try to get this stuff published, it would sell!

I have given much thought to selling illustrated paperback copies at cons 'n such...

I've heard that Rabbit Valley is a good place to sell stuff. Just a suggestion.

oooh, you should totally get fan illustrations!

I've actually given thought to having Wolfblade do some illustrations. His art style is damn close to how I envision my characters anyway. It'd cost a bunch, but be well worth it.

I'd so buy a copy man o.o

I'd support the illustration of Dangerous Lunatics.

Financially, I mean. (N.B. This does not mean I have the resources to order, say, fifty commissions right this afternoon or anything. Just sayin' if you want Wolfblade to do the illustrating and he needs some financial support to do so and you need some financial support to push his way...I'd be willing to push some your way, over a period of time. Consider it repetitive donations.)

I would also support the illustration effort financially. (With the same N.B. as Alfador.)

Same as what I told Alf; I'm amazed at the offer but I'm fine on money. Thank you though!

Oh, piffle! I can bloody well pay for my own comissions. You've been more than enough help, mi amigo! ^__^

... ... Alex? You had me upset with book one, furious in two, relieved in three, bawling like a dragon whelp in four... and now? Mow I'm floored, and now I'm just amazed that one author, that you can elicit so many different, varied reactions in so many people...

I can't friggin' wait for next Monday!

Thank you so much! It's like I've said; a writer can't expect his readers to feel anything unless they feel it themselves. I'm humbly happy to have succeeded. :)

After reading all of that... I'm just... In a stupor. I feel like I've been lobotomized by the pure climactic bliss of this. Maybe it was just me, but it kinda felt like an epilepsy in the euphoria center of my brain. Sorry to sound all fanboyish and stuff, but you are just amazing. Nothing I've read before has ever compared with this amount of comprehensive detail, depth(particularly of character), and just about every literary technique short of poetry. In my rather inexperienced opinion, you have the potential to be a very influential and possibly even world-changing author. Jes' one humble fur's opinion. ^^;;

And also, *Random burst of happy-emotion here*. You gave common items strong emotions or hyperbolized actions that both gave a strong sense of what the item is doing, as well as extra humor. I *love* it when authors do that <3

Finally, criticism... Err... Well, before my brain reached critical mass and melted down due to the quasi-orgasmic glee that this story created, I noticed a few 'to' and 'too' mistakes. Nothing big, though. At least nothing that I was able to comprehend. Hehe... Sorry about the lack of really constructive criticism.

Times like these remind me of the human element of the English language and its inability to be able to properly express pure emotion.

Lastly(Thank god...) if you managed to wade through all that praise without throwing up, wanting to beat my face with a golf club, and/or wanting to run away from a very impressed now-fan, just give yourself a little pat on the back. :p

Ah, the old 'sledgehammer to the brain' feeling. I've gotten that from good novels too. I'm euphoric to have caused it myself!

Not sure what you mean about the giving items emotions or hyperbole bit. Example?

And, well... Alfador and I proofread this huge fucker I don't know how many times. If some stuff slipped through, I can no longer muster the will to care. You shoulda seen it *before* we got to any editing!

And, btw, I gave myself a pat on the back. ;)

"The giant vehicle laughed." or "The coffeemaker in the nurses' lounge was acting like it was possessed." Like those. I think I picked my words horribly now that I think of it-anthropomorphicize would probably be a better word, but it isn't quite right. What I'm aiming at is when an object is given humanoid actions or emotions in such simple terms that the situation it is describing is extremely vivid, but also puts a bit of a sense of character into the object. I suppose. Once again, the english language fails me at being able to put exactly what I mean into words :/

Also, not complaining about the errors or anything-just noting ^^

Grr. My reply went to the wrong place...

Ahhhhh! Now I get it. Usin' metaphorical speech, you mean. I've always been kinda proud of how I wrangle similes and metaphors. A lot of times, there's no way to accurately describes how something *feels* without getting a little psychedelic. Sometimes the best word is the one that makes no logical sense.

Y'know, technically, the coffemaker WAS possessed... XD

That was friggin awesome, dude! The whole thing! So, I'm going to go to sleep now, having spent the last fourteen hours reading and probably damaging my eyes from constant exposure to the backlight from my laptop.

But I just wanted to say that you are a freaking amazing writer. I'm not a good enough writer to be able to tell you how much I mean that. ^^

The fact that you spent that long reading my stuff totally awes me. That's pretty much the biggest compliment you could give me. You're awesome, dude. *big hug*

Now get some sleep! ;)

Well, I get that way when something's really good. Like last year, when I was still in high school, I got book called The Tithe. I started reading it in class first hour because the teacher was a craptastic substitute and I was bored. I barely stopped other than when I had to and finished it at about 11:00 that night.

Aww, thanks for the hug! ^^

Y'know, it's probably because I'm gay, but I find myself loving the character of Keith so much! I think part of it is that whenever I see a character who's sort of a self-hating gay guy (which he's not, but alot of people kinda are if they hold it in that long), I just want to give him a huge hug and tell him it's okay. It's also that Keith is so flippin adorable, like in the chapter where he came out and Brad was all like "J00 get 1 kiss, kthnxbai."

You have a knack for creating many different characters, all of whom are unique, yet endearing and cute in their own ways. And if I was ever that good at animation, I would love to try making this into a movie (art's what I'm majoring in, so it might happen!).

He is adorable.;) That was a great way of putting it.:)

Indeed. That's the way he comes off to me. Plus, with anger problems, it's kinda like "aww, what an adorable little psycho!" Though we know that's not really the case.

I need to figure out how to draw foxes, so I can draw Keith. Anyone able to help?

Also, I remember reading that Keith likes punk and ska, so whenever I read about him, I start humming Reel Big Fish songs to myself.

all I can suggest in the way of drawing advice is to just sketch over and over and over again until what's on the paper matches what's in your brain. This WILL take a long time though, but it'll help develop your hand's memory for the character.

As far as Keith's taste in music goes, I've wondered if he might not like a much wider variety of music than just the stuff he owns. I can see him buying mostly from those genres because he feels a kid like him is just *sposto*.

Thanks for the tips. I'll try that, especially if I ever get to drawing Keith (which I hope to).

Also, I remember reading something like how Keith recognized that one classical song being used in some of his songs. That, to me, kinda means he may have more broad tastes, because I have known so many kids who flinch away at the mere mention of classical music. Just thought I'd throw in my two cents. ^^

As far as Keith, I envision him with the same kinda 'vibe' as Shadow The Hedgehog; all dark and grim on the outside but he can't quite help being cute too.

Yes!! That's totally why I put that bit in there! :)

Damn, between that and the whole One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest thing, we're like sharing a brain or something. We are the Borg.

But yeah, I've never tried drawing in a Sonic style, Ill have to give it a shot. See, since the kids are young, and I draw anime, they tend to have small bodies/bigger heads anyway, so that shouldn't be too hard. ^^

Okeydoke, that works. I didn't mean they're necissarily in a Sonic style, just that the body proportions are similar. Stylistically, I always see my characters in my own somewhat-Tiny-Toonsish drawing style. Only as if I could draw a whole lot better. ;)

You can draw pretty well, as far as I can see. Also, I just got my camera to work, so I'm uploading a pic of Karen as we speak. Be warned, though, I made her too tall, I think. Oh well. It's inked, too tale now. ^^;

I've read most of the Harry Potter books, and quite a few Stephen Kings in single sittings. It's a hell of a rush, but not too good for one's eyeballs.

Keith could have easily been just another stereotypical bully or antihero character, but I was really glad I was able to give him more credit than that. Depth, too. I imagine he may find it a bit easier to control some of his rage now that he's around people he can share his secret with.

And "J00 get 1 kiss, kthnxbai." gave me a severe case of the ROTFLes.

I'd envisioned this as an animated movie right from page one. Of course, no animation studio would ever touch it. After all, cartoons are strictly for kids and must be dull, toothless and insipid, right? *thhhbbfffttt*!!!

No, no... that just means that you either have to get it made in Japan, or have Taratovski (spelling, but the guy behind powerpuff girls and Samurai Jack) do it.

Besides for the fight scenes, the standard anime "...but they make the arterial blood spray look so artistic..." thing would work pretty well.

TARTAKOVSKI!?!? NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!

I love PPG & Dexter as much as the next guy, but this style of animation has practically stabbed the heart out of all cartoondom.

No, if this was ever a movie, I'd insist on full-fledged hand-drawn cel animation. Thinking about it that way, maybe Japan would be the way to go. I could ring up Rintaro or Otomo.

Studio Ghibli maybe? They *have* done movies of books before... (Howl's Moving Castle)

*mull* Nahhh. Much as I love their work, DL would simply need a much harder edge than Ghibli's capable of. Ghibli films simply don't dwell in truly evil worlds, and DL does.

Ever seen Pom Poko? A population of transforming tanuki fight a losing battle against environmental destruction by a human residential project. It's HARSH.

That's the one Ghibli film I have never been able to track down. Not for a lack of trying though. I know it has balls aplenty, which is probably why Disney would rather forget being forced to release it here.

If nothing else, you will definitely see it within the next year. 'Cause I'm bringing it to Anthrocon again in '08.

You = fucking awesomeness in a bag. ^__^

I've got so much awesomeness in this bag, it covers my whole dick! *bag wriggles*

I can bring my VHS DVD-ripped version too, if you'd like.

I was much more thinking Samurai Jack than PPG or Dexter... although now that I get my brain on straight the style, while serious wouldn't fit. Straight Anime would work better.

I'd still overall prefer an American animation studio, but we simply haven't evolved enough yet to view animation as a medium for anything other than kids' films.

Glad you enjoyed my sense of humor! Truly, I must try to draw these characters at some point, if you don't mind.

Also, dude, I'm totally gonna make an animation studio that would actually touch it. I think that's one reason why I like anime so much. They're not afraid to say "yeah, it's a cartoon made for adults, and it might be both thought provoking and horrendously sexual/violent. Who gives a shit?"

I'ma gonna go watch Pulp Fiction now. Maybe tomorrow I'll try my hand at drawing a character or two, if you don't mind. ^^

Go ahead! Draw, draw, draw! I'm always open to the possibility that someone else might be able to draw my charactrs a heckuva lot better than I can.

Well, I just got done inking a sketch of my mind's picture of Karen, so I'll show it to you as soon as I can upload it. I'll just take a picture with my camera or something, we don't have a scanner here. ^^

Got a friend you can bum scanner usage off of?

Well, this weekend I go back to my dad's house, and we have a scanner there, so I'll upload an ink and then maybe a color picture then, cause I like the way it's turning out. Though if it looks nothing like your envisioning of the character, just let me know. I've actually never drawn a raccoon before. ^^;

Sounds like a plan!

As I've been telling other prospective fanarters, I see the characters as having slightly sonic The Hedgehog-ish proportions. More anthro, but with big heads 'n skinny bodies. Except for Holly, of course. ;)

Huh. Well, my picture of Karen is more realistic, proportion-wise, but I'll pose it anyway, to see what you think. I imagine Beatrix as tall and slender, which would make her easy to draw in an anime style (ever notice how friggin tall some anime characters are?)

As a general rule of thumb, my characters usually look a bit more like toons than realistic anthros to me. Although year, you're totally right about Beatrix. Her appearance mirrors King's Orchard itself: A tall, imposing ivory tower.

Woohoo! First pic, successful! Check it out, tell me what you think! ^^

Yeah, this one ended up being about a billion times longer than I expected. I guess I was overcompensating for a syndrome I've seen other writers succumb to: tons and tons of description at the beginning and the middle, and then the ending's, like, three pages long. King and Straub's "Black House" suffers from this _badly_.

Also, I know the violence is pretty awful, but that's the point. I wanted to illustrate the difference between real insanity and the way this same kind of story would have played out in some generic kids' movie. Ones where not a drop of blood is ever seen and villains are stupid, one-dimesntional and completely lacking in motivation.

And yes it did end abruptly ...because it's not over yet! Book Six drops next Monday. :)

Heinlein suffered greatly from that syndrome. I've frequently finished off one of his books with "That's IT?! Where's the fricking sequel???"

Wow...I loved this story and your style of writing. You basically put everything in excellent detail.

I even have ideas of a sequal running around in my head. The story is just so action packed that sequal immeaditly popped in my head after reading the whole story or wait I think there's an epilogue coming up.

Anyway, thanks the for the story ^_^

Thanks very much!

Sequel ideas, eh? Well, wait till after the epilogue and then lay 'em on me. I have a billion and a half ideas for a sequel myself, but none of them are really big enough to devote a whole 'nother novel to.

Okay then.

But I must warn you, out of all my ideas there are a few wild ones.

If they ain't wild, they ain't worth discussin'. ;)

Awesome. Let there be wild ideas :)

Last week I cried for Tyler. Now I cried for him again, but this time it was of joy. The joy to read that he was alive, and how he even got his body back. That was amazing.

(Although, knowing you, I had suspected that you would not leave your characters out in the rain =^.^=)

Another thing, the development of the personality of your characters is wonderful. Karen in particular.

Ah, and one more reason to keep Beatrix's body alive (I wonder if there is a way to jettison her soul permanently?) is the good that can be wrought by her healing abilities being actually _used_. I wonder if she will be permitted to be visited by ill people in her prison cell.

(Yeh, the last remark kind of assumes that this is the end of the story as far as Beatrix is concerned, which I suspect it's not, but anyway.)

Looking forward to reading how the kids will finally also beat The Project in the final two parts ...

I admit it was kinda mean to make it look so totally like he was gone for good, but that's because shamelessly manipulating my audience is fun! ^__^

Beatrix's final destiny will be revealed in Book six. Til then, I will say no more.

Well, the fight against The Project is going to take much longer than I could ever wrap up in one more book. This story is very much an origin tale of a much, greater, grander story than I could ever tell by myself.

So I will be looking forward to final revelations on Monday.

And no, you are not mean for making it look as if Tyler was gone for good, merely a good writer.

(Actually, I had mistakenly assumed that there were seven, not six, books. (I had misunderstood your remark "one book a week, for six weeks" in a comment on Book 1 to mean "six more weeks.) This was part of why I had suspected that the remainder of the story must have to do with kicking The Project's ass.)

Book Six is admittedly quite short, but I hope to include a special prize (If I can figure out how to upload the basterid).

Ahhhh! It all comes clear now! ;)

Yay! New book tomorrow new book tomorrow! *bounces and dances*

That was perhaps one of the best stories in the world. It needs a major motion picture, starring Valerie Bert-and-Ernie and Keanu Reeves.

Or maybe just published. This is the best story ever... and there's a book 6??? WHAT???

oh my god you are now one of my favorite authors ever, not just furry authors but all time.;)

Keanu!? Eeeyah! He's good in certain roles, but I think he should stay away from serious roles for the most part.

And thank you very, very much. I just adore hearin' that! *hugs myself and grins giddily* ;)

"[Keanu] should stay away from serious roles" ==> So you are proposing he should play Tyler?

Lawd No! Tyler's _far_ beyond his dramatic capabilities!

'f _course_ not! I'm just kiddin' you!

Whoa... I know Moon River... lol.

I was just saying that as a hyperbole. I think.

Aw, hell! Missed comedy moment! When Karen wakes Tyler up during Brad 'n Bea's big battle, Tyler _totally_ should have said "...I know kung-fu!"

That is what post-publication revisions can be for... unless it would require too much a re-write to put the 'camera' there at that time...
Also I understand if you like to leave a work alone after 'publishing' except for spelling and grammar...

Actually, I'm just kidding. I was trying to get across that Tyler is much too zonked-out to even approach speech at that moment, much less attempt pop-culture references.

I imagined a close-up of Karen leaning down, her eyes squeezed tightly shut, to press her exaggeratedly puckered lips against those of the empty husk before her. As she hovers there, steeling herself to make the icky contact with her friend's comatose body, Tyler's spirit fidgets and crowds against the boundary of her mind like a paratrooper waiting to bail through the airplane door the very moment it opens.

The view snaps to a low shot from the end of the bed, peering from just beneath the comatose boy's bare, pink soles. Suddenly, his toes flare as his feet jerk, the space between them quickly filling with the blurry grayness of Tyler's rising torso. As his head flops upright atop his unevenly hunched shoulders, bringing his face into view, his pupils dilate in the gaping whites of his eyes beneath his tousled and pillow-flattened mop. His whiskers flutter and skew while his left eye spasms as if he were doing an impression of Chief Inspector Dreyfus.

Karen, having barely dodged the mouse boy's suddenly very animated body as it sprang upright, hugs her ringed tail as she peers over its tip and gently prods him for a response, understandably wondering whether or not the transfer has been entirely successful.

The moment that our beloved Tyler Lorenzo "gurgled" that bit of marvelous gibberish, I determined that I'd be using "hexi-dazmic" in conversation whenever appropriate from that point forward. If any other phrase had emanated from his mouth, it would have lessened a perfect moment.

You, Alex Reynard, are a singular treasure to the furry genre. Thank you so very, very much for your many works.

FucketyDAMN, that was well-described! If this becomes a movie, maybe you could be my cinematographer (not that I know exactly what they do).

This was one of many scenes I had been wanting to write for over a year before I actually got to it. 'Hexi-dazmic' is admittedly not a phrase original to me, but when I saw it (in a Flash about Kirby cooking hotdogs), I fell deeply in love with it.

Thank you, as well, for giving me a bigass grin. ^__^

Man. Just when I think you can't possibly outdo yourself, you just go right ahead and do it. Just when I think I know what's next, you surprise me. Just when I think it's safe to be crazy, it's dangerous to be a lunatic. I don't think I could say enough about what I took out of this story; it was such a striking contrast on the real world's ways in so many facets, yet ultimately held such fantasial elements next to very real characters that I couldn't help but love (and hate, respectively). I'm gonna note you about something right now, 'cause I just gotta give something back for all the entertainment this brought me.

I see I seem to have impressed you. :) Excellent. I really wanted to channel Joss Whedon with this last part; just keep throwing more and more 'Wait... WHAT!?!?' moments at the reader, especially when they're least expected. Once again, my formula of using every single idea I get pays off!

Mwahahaha! My intuition reigns supreme! It only took me unlil the Karen part after the electricity started to go haywire to get an idea of what happened to Tyler.

And in other news..

GOOD FREAKIN' GHANDI ON A POGO-STICK THAT WAS AWESOME. Worth every moment of waiting. I absolutely love what you did to Beatrix, I'm sure Jimmy will have a lot of fun with her. Can't wait for the last part to be posted.

Glad it met with your approval, amigo!

WHY IS IT THAT EVERYONE IN CONTACT WITH ALEX EXCEPT ME CAN COME UP WITH HILARIOUS EXCLAMATIONS AND INSULTS!??

Well for me at least it's due to lots and lots of practice.

I don't even know HOW to practice....

You don't know how to practice saying weird stuff? Hmm, you must be suffering from an overdose of sanity...I've heard of this before...not a pretty sight...

Waaaaaah! Enlighten me or I'll rip your lips off and shove them down your uthera!

There see, you're doing better already!

By the way, is 'GOOD-FREAKIN' GHANDI ON A POGO STICK!' copyrighted?

Not at all, use it to your heart's content. It's just an expanded version of my usual oath, 'Good Ghandi'.

I have to be honest, I saw Jimmy's secret a mile away. From the way he talked and everything when he freaked out on her, to every time he started pushing her, to the fact that he took WAY too much pleasure in that cigarette burn shit, I knew he wasn't a psych, just psycho.

However it was still SO fucking cool to see him turn on them and tell her what question she never asked.

That scene was rather intense to write. I'd hoped I'd be able to keep the subject of Jimmy's being ensnared by The Project out of the readers' mind, but, ah well. Congrats on having a keen mind.

This book is particularly amazing. I especially loved the way in which a thousand little elements weaved their way in and out and back into the story. On the downside, I feel like you could have done more with Kuni and Will. Despite your huge talent for pulling elements of your story, the "twins" just fall in and out of the story...
Still, as always, the finished product is astounding. Excellent work!

Juggling this many elements in a story climax is something I hope i never have to do again. Exhausting!

And the Rennaults are yet another case of characters who were supposed to be mere cameos yet insisted upon being more. I did the best I could with them.

You know, I'm quite impressed with your work. i think it needs some polish, and I'm not always a fan of the narration style, but you made fantastic characters, put them in a great setting, and the story blossomed.

I would loooove love love to do the illustrations for this, if you still want to commission them. I would be also happy to make a deal with you to do it. http://www.foxling.net or http://amberfoxwing.deviantart.com ... I'm Alf's friend, so that's how I found you. But if you have a vision, and Wolfblade is your vision, by all means ;)

Book Siiiiix

Thanks very much for the feedback and the offer, but I must respectfully decline. Your work is a bit too anthro; my vision is much toonier.

Egg-mc-freakin-zactly?

I forget where it came from, but I'd been waiting the whole project for a place to put that line! :)

Hey, I'm just tickled pink you worked in a Slither reference, for god's sake! Awesome story so far, gonna fall over and pass out now, but I'm very glad to have tripped over you again, and read this story we talked about quite some time ago. There is no doubt in my mind why i love your work. The characters are flawlessly believable, and the tales extremely well crafted. Wonderful stuff.

>Hey, I'm just tickled pink you worked in a Slither reference, for god's sake!

It was as simple as, 'I need a trustworthy cop character ... ... ... Why not Bill Pardy?"

>There is no doubt in my mind why i love your work. The characters are flawlessly believable, and the tales extremely well crafted. Wonderful stuff.

<big blush> Thanks very much. It always does me good to hear things like that. :)

I cried so many time. If you ever published this as a book I'd be the first one to buy the first edition! Hell, I'd ever offer to do the printing!

I've definitely considered it. I'd want to get some really good illustrations for it though.

O.< i got the same "problem" as little brad does to a degree though slitly different it isent that i want to protect people well i do BUT more along the lines of i cant help but to want to help others.... it can get OH SO annoying at times you see but i also "suffer" from what brad has when he sees injustice going on or in this cause cruelity and that is that my blood feels like it is litterailly BOILING quite a good set of books almost finished with this one you see so cant wait to see how this all ends though i do hope the bitch and well... caercase both fry >.>

>i also "suffer" from what brad has when he sees injustice going on or in this cause cruelity and that is that my blood feels like it is litterailly BOILING

There's certainly nothing crazy about that. Brad's only real problem is that he's defiant. And adults do not like defiance in kids. If a kid can't be controlled, there 'must be something wrong with them. Put them on pills!' I wanted to show with the various kids here that while some of them do have real mental illness, others aren't crazy at all, but simply don't conform.

>quite a good set of books almost finished with this one you see so cant wait to see how this all ends though i do hope the bitch and well... caercase both fry >.>

I'm glad you like what you've read so far and I hope you like the rest . :)

ya i defienetly fell into the not listening part not out of spit i just never saw the reason to have to bite my tongue as it were yes it is fustrating when no one will believe you about things of a supernatral nature but you do learn quite quickly why you can and can not trust. not say i dont still have some problems stilllike that OH SO dangerous problem of ADD being a "HENDERENCE" it is a load sure i cant concentrate on one thing at a time but it is funny seeing that well i think Dr. Jones said it best when talking to tylor about the engineer. sadly i will admit that my brain never EVER stops working always going on methodicly with caculations ideas and other such interesting things. but it would be interesting no? about what always-Jimmy-never-james sagested about either the disorder brings out the powers r the powers cause the disorder. i know my spelling is horible in place LOL

>sadly i will admit that my brain never EVER stops working always going on methodicly with caculations ideas and other such interesting things.

The biggest problem with schools is that they think they can teach a huge range of individuals in exactly the same manner and have it work equally well for all of them. If there was any sense in the system, teachers would recognize that not everyone who thinks differently is mentally ill just because their way of thinking conflicts with the system. In the case of ADD, the best quote I've ever heard on the subject was something like, "Well, maybe you're not giving them anything WORTHY of being focused on!"

>but it would be interesting no? about what always-Jimmy-never-james sagested about either the disorder brings out the powers r the powers cause the disorder.

I'm glad that i left that ambiguous. I think it's a bit of both for most of them, actually.

>i know my spelling is horible in place LOL

I can get past that, but adding more periods after your sentences and more capitalization would help. ;)

Inbetween shifts at Dollar General, I have been wrapped around the universe of your story like a Dog forced to wear a harness for a walk.

So this is almost Bojack Horseman levels of exciting, depressing, and fucked up. Really. Really. Really fucked up. To quote Always-Jimmy-Never-James, "FUBAR". You are very interesting. I like your tone, and I gravitate towards these fucking Sci-Fi/Superhero stories like a poverty-stricken community does around convenience stores. What the fuck.

Brad and Karen would have to be my new favorite characters now. Mind if someday I did a little fanart based on them? It won't be anything great, because I am shit as an artist.

I missed a lot of themes in this story. But I understand that kids hurt, and it is sometimes trauma that helps to build the people they become. I cannot necessarily say they become the most well-adjusted folks out there, but they grow up. People cannot help how they were born, but what is far more important than that is what they do with themselves. Each step helps them go further. That pain they may feel along their way is a sign of their journey to get there. And constantly finding their courage to admit that some trials they cannot face alone is part of it. It may even involve doing things you cannot imagine yourself doing, as Victor demonstrated.

Also, your tone reminds me so much of a Stephen King Novel. There. I fucking said it. Feel free to send me an angry message later concerning how I am all over the goddamned place with my comment.

Take care.