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MY FIRST SUBMISSION!!! I'm so proud to submit this!
This was a story I thought up a few years back.
I revised it so I'd have my first submission for FA.
UPDATED!
This was a story I thought up a few years back.
I revised it so I'd have my first submission for FA.
UPDATED!
Category Story / All
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 34.5 kB
I really like the idea of it. Though I think when Sheena lost her mother and Chieko found out about it, there should have been more emotion behind it, it was someone they cared about. and 10 days seems a short time to be seemingly back to normal. And Shiki did seem to give up the ring easily, felt there should have been more of a fight for it. other than that, i like the idea and if you make more let me know
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