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Here it is the last of my main characters reference sheets
Luz is kinda my hardest to draw. mostly because i cant quite pin down his personality in my pictures. some time he will act like freaking jack sparrow or hell act inteligently and analiticaly.
after all he is a master of solving puzzles a lady's man a womanizer a drunkard a charismatic person and a leader at sometimes. never a coward though he dose dislike violence. (and yet he is carying a gun and a blade.
oh well
enjoy
Luz is kinda my hardest to draw. mostly because i cant quite pin down his personality in my pictures. some time he will act like freaking jack sparrow or hell act inteligently and analiticaly.
after all he is a master of solving puzzles a lady's man a womanizer a drunkard a charismatic person and a leader at sometimes. never a coward though he dose dislike violence. (and yet he is carying a gun and a blade.
oh well
enjoy
Category Artwork (Digital) / Fantasy
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I do have some critique on his weaponry.
He's a pirate, so I understand a cutlass like weapon is very suitable. But it's so thick! That's a two handed weapon, and it's far too lopsided with it's weight distribution to ever be used backhanded.
Not only that but it's handle will break after a few swings. It doesn't even need to hit something, it will break. Bandages on swords piss me off too. It's worthless decor that will be destroyed after one battle. Will probably wrap itself around his arm afterward and cost him his life too.
You've got good character design but you need to research what exactly you should arm them with, and use references.
Consider this. He's on the high sea's. He would want an extremely easy to hold weapon, that requires little to no skill due to outside influences on his ability to use it. There's waves. There's ships crashing into the other. There are cannon balls hitting his ship, he's on a rope, he's holding plunder, he's capturing other captains. He absolutely must have a smaller melee weapon than what you have him with now.
He's a pirate, so I understand a cutlass like weapon is very suitable. But it's so thick! That's a two handed weapon, and it's far too lopsided with it's weight distribution to ever be used backhanded.
Not only that but it's handle will break after a few swings. It doesn't even need to hit something, it will break. Bandages on swords piss me off too. It's worthless decor that will be destroyed after one battle. Will probably wrap itself around his arm afterward and cost him his life too.
You've got good character design but you need to research what exactly you should arm them with, and use references.
Consider this. He's on the high sea's. He would want an extremely easy to hold weapon, that requires little to no skill due to outside influences on his ability to use it. There's waves. There's ships crashing into the other. There are cannon balls hitting his ship, he's on a rope, he's holding plunder, he's capturing other captains. He absolutely must have a smaller melee weapon than what you have him with now.
thanks for the tips
1: its not a cutlass its a broadsword that looks like one so yes it is thick. as for why he is holding it in one hand its just a pose he actually uses either one or the other and he uses both hands. he is the heavy hitter of the team that dosent wear down.
as for the bandages on the blade its more to keep the blade in place as kind of a harness to the handle and its made of a magicaly reinforced cloth that acts similar to kevlar in some ways. i cant make you like it i understand that.
and are you sure about the smaller weapon thing that's kinda what his pistol is for he only uses his broadsword for certain battles and its also a relic belonging to his dad so i cant really get rid of it (also it has importance to the plot if only a small part). if you want he cn have a smaller cutlass hidden in his boot but then that would make him more like Able who is hand to hand fighter and and dagger user.
thanks for the advice though it helps out. and it can help me develop him further.
1: its not a cutlass its a broadsword that looks like one so yes it is thick. as for why he is holding it in one hand its just a pose he actually uses either one or the other and he uses both hands. he is the heavy hitter of the team that dosent wear down.
as for the bandages on the blade its more to keep the blade in place as kind of a harness to the handle and its made of a magicaly reinforced cloth that acts similar to kevlar in some ways. i cant make you like it i understand that.
and are you sure about the smaller weapon thing that's kinda what his pistol is for he only uses his broadsword for certain battles and its also a relic belonging to his dad so i cant really get rid of it (also it has importance to the plot if only a small part). if you want he cn have a smaller cutlass hidden in his boot but then that would make him more like Able who is hand to hand fighter and and dagger user.
thanks for the advice though it helps out. and it can help me develop him further.
I understand. Just be careful how often you explain something by having it a relic or some other magical enchantment. People need to be able to connect with your characters or they might not take your story seriously.
Read the story of Beuwolf. Like, the actual story of Beuwolf. Killing a giant with a manly handshake is just stupid.
Also, Cutlasses are usually 2'6", and would not do well in a boot. If he's keeping the sword, I hope you make sure he's always in a wide open area. Same with any flashbacks of his father.
This sword of his, it has history. I understand that. Why on earth would a Pirate lord come to be in possession of it? You have to explain that now. How has the weapon helped him in the past? How will that reflect on how Luz comes to rely on it? Why is it not a Cutlass? You're breaking a Trope and that requires an Explanation. That's two things you need to explain about it now. When are you going to fit that into the story? It better be right at the beginning or it's gonna nag at people. But then you run the risk of information overload. See how this paragraph is too damn long?
You're writing yourself into a corner, and you're allowing yourself to be saved by Dues-Ex-Machina.
My English professor, who I should add has a PhD in literature and is currently touring Europe to promote his books, told me if you have something you think is awesome for whatever reason, you should remove it from your story. Chances are, you're the only one who thinks it's cool. See Stephenie Meyer.
Read the story of Beuwolf. Like, the actual story of Beuwolf. Killing a giant with a manly handshake is just stupid.
Also, Cutlasses are usually 2'6", and would not do well in a boot. If he's keeping the sword, I hope you make sure he's always in a wide open area. Same with any flashbacks of his father.
This sword of his, it has history. I understand that. Why on earth would a Pirate lord come to be in possession of it? You have to explain that now. How has the weapon helped him in the past? How will that reflect on how Luz comes to rely on it? Why is it not a Cutlass? You're breaking a Trope and that requires an Explanation. That's two things you need to explain about it now. When are you going to fit that into the story? It better be right at the beginning or it's gonna nag at people. But then you run the risk of information overload. See how this paragraph is too damn long?
You're writing yourself into a corner, and you're allowing yourself to be saved by Dues-Ex-Machina.
My English professor, who I should add has a PhD in literature and is currently touring Europe to promote his books, told me if you have something you think is awesome for whatever reason, you should remove it from your story. Chances are, you're the only one who thinks it's cool. See Stephenie Meyer.
Pirates use cutlasses. That is the trope. It's a characteristic expected of Pirates.
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.p.....etweenTheTeeth
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cutlas.....istory_and_Use
If it's a key to a ship, why not make it smaller, more manageable? Like an Amulet.
And I'm not happy now that you've blown up on me. I'm an asshole; the kind that knows how to write, and take critique good and bad. But I'm exactly the asshole you want to critique your work. I actually wouldn't do it if I didn't like you, as it takes a fair bit of my time. I've had my idea's torn apart often enough that I've begun to do it myself, and every time I do I get better at writing. There's a good reason out of a class of 35 that we're making the game I pitched and not any of the other 17 idea's presented.
Be honest with yourself, this is a non fetish and non furry art piece on a highly fetish intensive furry website. I reckon 10% of your audience gives a damn about it based on those two alone, about 15 % of everyone on this website even reads comments, and this information you gave out is so trivial that I would not be surprised if anyone but me remembers it by the time you release this story to the public. You didn't spoil a thing. Just relax, and keep sharing your work. It'll improve only with other people giving their input.
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.p.....etweenTheTeeth
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cutlas.....istory_and_Use
If it's a key to a ship, why not make it smaller, more manageable? Like an Amulet.
And I'm not happy now that you've blown up on me. I'm an asshole; the kind that knows how to write, and take critique good and bad. But I'm exactly the asshole you want to critique your work. I actually wouldn't do it if I didn't like you, as it takes a fair bit of my time. I've had my idea's torn apart often enough that I've begun to do it myself, and every time I do I get better at writing. There's a good reason out of a class of 35 that we're making the game I pitched and not any of the other 17 idea's presented.
Be honest with yourself, this is a non fetish and non furry art piece on a highly fetish intensive furry website. I reckon 10% of your audience gives a damn about it based on those two alone, about 15 % of everyone on this website even reads comments, and this information you gave out is so trivial that I would not be surprised if anyone but me remembers it by the time you release this story to the public. You didn't spoil a thing. Just relax, and keep sharing your work. It'll improve only with other people giving their input.
look im sorry bout the last post i was getting kind of angry.
for the blade ther is little to know dues ex machina. its an object that will help to propel the main characters around the world.
he dosent use it as a weapon its just always on his back until he finds his ship and whats left of his crew. he uses guns just guns. the sword is just for a pose in my pictures but it wont be like that in the comic and it wont be happening till book 3 so i have time to refine his character. same with evare who dosent show up till book 2
Adam and Able and and unknown character will be the main of book 1 then evare joins up then richter. then the party is complete
im not keeping it because its cool im keepingit because it helps the plot.
is that better?
and im reallysorry
for the blade ther is little to know dues ex machina. its an object that will help to propel the main characters around the world.
he dosent use it as a weapon its just always on his back until he finds his ship and whats left of his crew. he uses guns just guns. the sword is just for a pose in my pictures but it wont be like that in the comic and it wont be happening till book 3 so i have time to refine his character. same with evare who dosent show up till book 2
Adam and Able and and unknown character will be the main of book 1 then evare joins up then richter. then the party is complete
im not keeping it because its cool im keepingit because it helps the plot.
is that better?
and im reallysorry
you've heard of tattooed eyes right?
same thing just larger scale and done with magic instead of ink
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Corneal_tattooing
same thing just larger scale and done with magic instead of ink
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Corneal_tattooing
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