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Yeah! FINALLY finished this pic! This picture is probably the one that take most time for me finish it. I did Berry aroung May of last year (poster here on dA also) and just did Viper heads last December. XD
Since my fA was a bit stopped recently, I wanted to post a more detailed pic, than just a character in a blank background.
Pages 21 to 34 of Chapter 18 available!!
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XDragoon #18: Above the Ice, Under the Earth
Script, Art and Colors: Felipe Marcantonio
Translation Revision: Jim Eriksson
Pages: 48
January 2012
ENGLISH
http://xdragoon.com/comics/en/018/index.php
PORTUGUESE
http://xdragoon.com/comics/pt/018/index.php
Since my fA was a bit stopped recently, I wanted to post a more detailed pic, than just a character in a blank background.
Pages 21 to 34 of Chapter 18 available!!
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XDragoon #18: Above the Ice, Under the Earth
Script, Art and Colors: Felipe Marcantonio
Translation Revision: Jim Eriksson
Pages: 48
January 2012
ENGLISH
http://xdragoon.com/comics/en/018/index.php
PORTUGUESE
http://xdragoon.com/comics/pt/018/index.php
Category All / All
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 849 x 1200px
File Size 595.4 kB
Page 17: "He can't take too much excitement!" <---Replace He's with He.
Page 21: Second panel, put a period after "futile" instead of a comma. Otherwise it's a big run-on sentence.
Page 25: I believe the word you want is "dishonorable". Unhonorable isn't a word. Also put a period after "place", not a comma.
Page 30: It's a little redundant to tell the reader the capsule is at the end of the area when the character points out it in the following panel. Maybe change what Lance is saying.
Page 21: Second panel, put a period after "futile" instead of a comma. Otherwise it's a big run-on sentence.
Page 25: I believe the word you want is "dishonorable". Unhonorable isn't a word. Also put a period after "place", not a comma.
Page 30: It's a little redundant to tell the reader the capsule is at the end of the area when the character points out it in the following panel. Maybe change what Lance is saying.
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