You have some amazing tact when it comes to character pathos and relationships. This is an excellent strength to have as a first person writer. It keeps the audience engaged with the narrative speaker and allows for enjoyment of the work.
However, the work has some weakness.
The first a beginning is a very important thing as it serves to grasp the audiences attentions into the work from the get go. Intriguing dialogue, action, or novel description best serves in this manner.
There is also the wrong use of tense. Use past tense instead of present as it creates an allusion of happening for an audience.
This will help your flow and balance out the description in the work. Description in first person works often creates a lack of description for trade for the characters inner thoughts and feelings, in your case though you have a wonderful grasp at shaping description in relationship to the narrative speaker. Fixing the tenses will splendidly add to this.
Despite you do well with description there are moments where you still tell instead of show. In these moments you mostly tell us details and elements of the world. Let the audience see them occur naturally and if required reinforce explanation through dialogue. This lets the audience explore a work for themselves and the world come to life more.
These short chapters are also dialogue heavy. Splitting dialogue and tagging it to action will help flow and help create scene.

No offence is made by my observations shaped by opinion and frame of reference. Best of luck as you have some talent that can only expand with practice and a will for improvement.

Criticism is always welcome and I'm thankful for it, actually. I have always had trouble with description though I didn't realize I switched tenses. I'll have to watch for this as I continue writing.
Thanks for reading!