Alright you have a lot of improvement needed for this story.
First you need to Understanding the rhetorical triangle:
How everything you do applies to the purpose of your work.
Everything you do writing is an argument of yourself (your ideas) versus your audience versus your text.
Everything you do writing is an argument of logos (logic) versus Ethos (Ethics ) versus pathos (emotion).
These all affect each other and every little thing impacts them and can make or break a work.

First person is far more difficult then third person as it is dependent upon a single narrative speaker. All description and other characterization need to be reflected and bounced off this speaker via interaction and dialogue.
Through your description you need to show through this interaction instead of tell through details. This helps create scene and flow for your audience.
You should use past tense instead of present tense as this creates the illusion of happening for the audience.

() parenthesis are not needed in fiction, as anything said should be a apart of the text itself. It is a wonderful habitat to have for nonfiction though.
A beginning is an important thing it needs to grasp your audience attentions. You do well with the foreshadowing dream sequence, but you need to transition it into the waking world.
Your characterization needs work, these characters need to be given faces so the audience can remember them and feel with them this includes the narrative speaker. Use interaction to help build this.
.� I “admonish”, admonish is a very strong word that one does not do in normal conversation even typical lecturing you should use something else here.

The use of Camelot and Albion/Avalon (King Arthur) is a trope that falls into the cliché for high fantasy and pretty much fantasy in general.
There is danger in using it as it can break your work do to fallacy of A La Priori myth and legend. Rhetoric in the logos hurts the work here.
You need to take careful time in planning the work and fixing your trope use to make rhetorical sense for your works purpose.
The chapters need to transition. Each chapters end should lead into the next one in a form of fashion for flow all leading to your conflict of resolution.
A battalion is usually about 500- 1000 soldiers. A company is around 80-100 men. In medieval Europe it was common to use blunt sided blades to cause trauma instead of sharpened blades. Blades like the Claymore usually had a blunt side to cause impacts through armor and shields along with dismounting cavalry similar to the blunt side of the Japanese No-dachi.
As your write you need to ask yourself questions on how things make sense. How do they work with the audience, how does the text portray them, what is it you want them to perform.
How do your characters make sense and interact in the world that they live?
How does your setting work in the fictional universe that it exists or in real world history in relationship with the Arthurian mythos?
These are things to work on. Writing takes time and lots of it. Research also helps. Keep up the writing.

thanks for the input, seems like i missed quite a bit! :( this is really the first story ive ever written, so i really appreciate the detail that you've given on how to improve! i will definitely take all that you have said into consideration and will see what i can do about the next chapter! thanks!